Reviews for New life of the God of Monsters
Guest chapter 17 . 7/26
Please keep writing that hate a good unfinished story
The DragonKnight chapter 17 . 7/22
Please continue this! I beg of you!
Nihatclodra chapter 16 . 2/26
yeah... I personally would say no to the slave harem. Artemis is already acting extremely ooc as it is without THAT added mess...
The conmanw chapter 17 . 1/15
Can you add Hecate to the Harem maybe even a Fem Raiden from Mortal Kombat since he is Technically the Japanese God of Thunder
Devildogg20 chapter 17 . 10/21/2019
Well there goes any interesting things this story may have had. Oh well.
TianLongYi chapter 17 . 9/22/2019
as per list in the harem percy list will you let others fuck your women?
LuBu081 chapter 3 . 9/8/2019
Punctuation took a dive to Tartarus along with Percy.
Criticism chapter 1 . 8/31/2019
This story feels rushed and more trying to be a comedy over a story that should be serious. A lot of Percy Jackson fanfics have this problem of being too nonchalant about the tone of the story and it really cheapens the experience of what would otherwise be a great story. Making this a much more serious book and not a “‘Yup’ he said popping the p” book.
jubilee loves pyro chapter 2 . 9/1/2019
U h auu68iy5 try opiu06kguis up 5gu I'm yuuh piu0 8ii98 oilO8 oiuu7o up tryl eohoP iuhuoiu
ArkhamKnight310 chapter 17 . 8/30/2019
I honestly can’t remember if I have ever commented on this story since it has been quite a while since the last update so If I did and I repeat anything please forgive me.

First of all I enjoy the story it’s got an interesting plot and has managed to be one of the few stories with lemons that doesn’t devolve into a lack of plot so good job. That being said I do recommend you perhaps get a beta. Your story is REALLY good but I find quite a few errors in grammar and even worse there are parts that seem to be completely missing the end of whatever they are trying to say. It’s not enough to make me stop reading but it is enough to somewhat be annoying.

Also the slave thing could work if you really want it to depending on how you play it (you’re doing well so far so I don’t doubt you) but you should also keep in mind how far out of character you are willing to make Percy go. At a certain point the only thing he’s gonna have in common with cannon is his name. There’s nothing wrong with and there are some that pull it off just a thought. (As an aside his mother could also be included since he is indeed a god of lust as his powers grow it seems his others do as well so it is plausible that he loses control when he sees her as she is said to be attractive. It would allow for an awkwardness and still allow her to be included while also still keeping the route open for a paternal relationship. Conversely she technically isn’t his mother anymore so that could be his reasoning.)

As for depowering Percy...
Honestly in my opinion that’s a mistake. His power level was never fully established in the first place so 1/4 is arbitrary. There’s also the fact that you have now included another plotting character. Again that’s fine but you have to be careful adding too many separate plot points going at once it can get hard to maintain all of them. ESPECIALLY if you don’t want to regularly update and/or make longer chapters.

Sorry bout the long post I always get carried away when I see a story with great potential in plot. You’re doing well just trying to give feedback on what I think would make the story even better. I could have honestly wrote WAY more...
Arraia chapter 17 . 8/30/2019
Perfect and update soon please
Perseu x Gaia
JoshuaLifeheart chapter 17 . 8/30/2019
I'm just going to say that I don't think we had a great grip on how strong Percy was. As a result, I don't feel that Percy losing 3/4ths of his power is a big deal.
WanderingMercAsashi chapter 4 . 8/29/2019
Boring garbage.
xXCoopyXx chapter 17 . 8/25/2019
Damn... having an op Percy was the reason I enjoyed this story, for you to come back and suddenly nerf him makes me start to stop reading this
Eddys700 chapter 17 . 8/25/2019
Make it so percy can’t get controlled by the Olympians will Percy get that power back I thought he is supposed to be OP and get nemesis as a slave for this
253 | Page 1 2 3 4 11 .. Last Next »