I love it! Please write more chapters!

I love it

If you are new writer then this is great if you are new writer on THIS side then this is great.

Cute. :) I liked it. Good first fanfic!

One word of advice - learn to properly use paragraph breaks. In particular that last paragraph turns into an almost illegible wall of text. One guide to remember is that when quoting two or more characters you should start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes, For example:
"Does this look all right?" she asked.
"That looks fine" he responded with his usual solemn tone.

Also, I'm pretty sure that Yaoyorozu got over her lack of confidence problem when she and Todoroki were able to get past Aizawa by working together during their first end-of-term exam. This was several weeks before the students moved into the dorm.

Hey, don't be so hard on yourself! This was a really enjoyable read, and extremely well done.

hi there! I just had the pleasure of reading your little story, and I absolutely loved it! it was so cute! do you plan on continuing it? Also, I have some constructive criticism for you! I remember when I first started writing stories on this site too, and people tend to be very kind when helping improve your writing so don't worry about making mistakes! So firstly, take advantage of line breaks. it makes setting changes in the story much smoother and less confusing for the reader. Second, break up your quotes. Start a new line when a new person is talking because when its all together people can be confused as to who is speaking. Since its mostly just todomomo in this story it wasn't much of a problem, but when you add more people it can get messy. Third, when writing a scene where there isn't a lot of dialogue make the mental note to make a new paragraph after every five or six lines or so? that's just an idea, but it breaks up the writing a bit more lol I had issues with this too when I was figuring out my writing. To be honest I looked at a lot of other people's writing styles and would compare it to mine, and kinda decide what i liked and what i didn't. I highly recommend doing that as well. I'm a bit of a free writer myself. I'm not a big fan of "brainstorming" or making a "skeleton". I prefer to just write and see where the story takes me lol. Something I've learned though is to just write freely, then go back to what you've written and see what you can add or take away and refine what you've written. Ya know what I mean? And don't be so hard on yourself! it's your first story, but to be honest its way better than anything I wrote when I first started on this site lol, it just needs a little refining is all! I hope that this helped even if only a little!