not throwing shade at u, bit I hate it when real world countries like Japan and USA are mentioned. it completely screws up the map in my head. and I guess ur going with the over sexualized version. I just stopped reading after surge says stuff. all the best with your fic. it's just not for me.

thx for the notice missed the rewrite completely

I’m very happy to discovered this story. To be honest, I’ve never really seen Surge as compassionate, but he’s got a unique style. While Delia is a loving parent, she did fail at making sure her son was 100% prepared for his journey (seriously, what mom would send her son out with a disobedient Pokémon).

I’m looking forward to more, especially Ash and Surge’s gym battle!

Another excellent chapter! Loved it a TON. And lol. I was wondering where Misty was at first!

Another excellent chapter. I enjoyed reading it!

Excellent work on this! I love the pairing suggestions! I really hope Dawn is added. But I digress. I gotta say, you wrote down everything well! I found the ending of this chapter to be quite adorable too. Lol.

Excellent start to this! Really realistic! And omg! Pichu?! KAWAII!

So what I don't get, is why you have Kanto as Japan in a few places and Surge talking about America, Iraq and such. The hell dude?

The biggest problem with this story is the complete and utter lack of description though. It's a terribly bland read without it, especially in the battles. You just have a move called, and say it either hits or misses, you don't describe the shape, the speed, the damage it does to surrounding's and so on.

quite a story. at first I thought it was one of those generic. "Ash's mom died by" insert reason" and now ash must become stronger to exact revengeand miraculously gets the power by weird means. but nope. none of that. And believe me I love the sexual innuendos and scenes but going as far as Ash saying "She wants the rod"? and having him being kissed by nearly every women he comes across? kinda over doing it don't you think? he's still what? 12-13(in your story?) but your story your rules. keep up the good work

you bashed on some great teams there but you like the clippers who have always choked in the playoffs lmao

besides that, the pichu sweet kiss scene was hysterical.

delia dying...you monster. sorry forgot to comment that last chapter lol

pichu such a mischievous pokemon

Good day to you. I've just read this story in one sitting, and I'm enjoying it so far. Still, have you considered a beta reader to help with your english? Your english is actually very good, but you get tripped up by some false cognates (words which look like other words from your native language but mean something different). Are you perhaps a native speaker of portuguese, or maybe spanish? I speak portuguese, and some of your "mistakes" would make lots of sense from a portuguese speaker. And some of your reviews are in spanish, so...
Well, anyways, I am enjoying this story, and intend to follow it. Your literary flow is actually very great.
You mentioned in a review that Ash will use Pikachu as well as a Raichu. Are you thinking Light Ball (it's an item that makes a Pikachu stronger than Raichu)?
I'd like your battles to be longer, though. Some of them are too short, one neutrally effective blow finishing a fight. Also, there is a recurring idea in Pokemon fanfiction that Gym Leaders have loads of Pokemon of various levels and use different pokemon according to the number of badges of the challenger. For example, if someone came to Brock for an 8th gym badge challenge, he'd use a Tyranitar in the fight.
Well, that's it for now. I'm sure there are lots more things I just can't remember right now. I'll review again next chapter.

Hmm this story is good, but at the same time I seriously do not believe that an Alolan Raichu will only evolve from a pikachu that uses a thunderstone on one of it's islands. That is virtually the same cop-out of leafeon/glaceon/sylveon never being found in Kanto. I know those forms weren't invented during the airing, but at the same time there has to be something special, because I seriously doubt there is a 50/50 chance you will get a Raichu or an Alolan Raichu on the island. I would rather the Riachu's actually have a 50/50 shot everywhere. Same with Alolan Vulpix/ninetails. I just do not like how a lot of Gen 1 pokemon magically have a different form on a chain of islands without it being anywhere else.

It's like having Flying types in only certain islands. I know they are the native bird types, but does not mean they don't fly to other regions. Same with Water types. I know some don't like the temperature of the water in some area's but NONE of the other native types can be seen, Also Bug types.

Sorry for the rant just always annoyed me when I read stories and people just only have the original 151 in Kanto without actually thinking on how the other pokemon are.

I'm enjoying the story so far, and can't wait to see where you take it. You did excellent world building in chapter one, fusing the real world and Pokemon world.

As a word of warning, if you watch the Zoroark movie, be prepared to be ill. The villain is a genuine villain in this movie. The actions the villain commits toward the end toward other Pokemon may make you feel physically ill. But the movie was decent.

Any other films besides Zoroark you havnt seen?

I'm really curious how you plan to handle the Unown/Entei film without Ash's mom. Or a few episodes she was involved in more poor Mr

Hahaha, the explanation from one of the pokemon directors, about why Tracey replaced Brock, is hilariously stupid for me. Speaking of Brock, I like his "dream" of claiming the hat, preferably the pink one. Since Brock eventually aspires to be a pokemon doctor, it would be funny imagining him having sex with his nurses whenever he has any downtime.
I like seeing Solidad being used as another girl liking Ash. She doesn't get used like that, very often. Would love to see her appear again in the story and become part of the harem or a friends with benefits relationship with Ash.
Ash's retelling of his mother's death was a nice touch. Sad but it does show how Ash had to become more mature at such a young age. Interested to see how you re-introduce Misty into Ash's journey next chapter.