I can’t say that that with his flaw is completely correct.
He’s loyal to his friends, not the gods and because his friends fight for the gods he does too.
He isn’t loyal to the gods and his actions say that pretty clearly.
Otherwise I liked this oneshot
Bye
Yess

Like the way it ended... but would have liked if athena said look at you now , you are still fighting for ur friends when he challenged gods and getting into a dangerous situation . The flaw is also present for their parents so theoretically athena's flaw is also pride..

:'(

Awesome writing!

Woahhhhhh
This is DEEP

Loved it! Sooo much whoah

This hit me in the feels

Can make a story that goes deeper as the seven find out why loyalty is a bad fatal flaw because I think that would be a perfect way to expand this story. I loved this story by the way this is a very original idea and you are a great writer.

Damn, can you expand on this story more? This is fantastic!

Wow. That's pretty deep for Percy. I wasn't expecting something like that, especially for someone whose fatal flaw is being too loyal.

At first I was slightly sceptical, but this was amazing. I liked how you incorporated events that happened in the story, but also things that didn’t, while for everything adding your own personal wist. Overall, it is well written and I’m definitely looking forward to anymore PJO stories or one-shots you public.

To be honest, its been a while since I’ve finished a fic immediately and not leaving it and coming back to it every so so often, so thanks for that.