I like how Charles is, not bad I mean, same with everyone !

Just read through the whole thing recently. I like the merge between Yandere Sim and DDLC. Without the Yandere Sim elements and characters, the school probably would've felt more dead. Your crossover is a good combination, and it hasn't fallen into the pitfall that most merged universe crossovers fall into (mainly being so many setting contradictions and lack of proper worldbuilding that it creates a huge mess). HP and its magic culture makes the world feel alive, and Yandere Sim combined with DDLC makes the school and its occupants feel alive and familiar.

It's also great that it doesn't solely focus on the school to the point that the rest of the outside world doesn't exist or matter. Most fanfics involving schools tend to do that.

Anyways, the story is pretty good. I don't see anything wrong with it, except maybe the way the dialogue is sometimes arranged, but that's more just personal taste than anything else.

Well, I'm glad some magicals are sensible at least.
Is the twin bond going to play a significant role in the story?

Damn it harry, you clueless bastard, you jinxed yourself!

Natsuki's a bitch

Woohoo!

Bit odd for him to be so cautious about using magic here when he used it without a second thought last chapter to follow Natsuki home & calm down her father.

Assuming that these were entirely new characters, I feel like it would be a bit jarring to be getting introduced to 5 new characters with absolutely no connection between them. I would prefer it if these short backstories were placed after the character had been introduced/ showed up in the main chronology of the story, so the reader knows a bit more about the character already.

Love the alterations you made. Can't wait to read more of this story hopefully soon!

Dobby has removed the trash. Hah.

Surprised. Oh definitely surprised to see this alive. Reread this gem. There are a fee points that are tapered off and the spacing could be better with some of the text, but otherwise it is still amazing. A different direction to what you had, but same type of feel. Nice job

Why do I feel like I had seen these chapters before?

I feel terrible that I only found this fic now. I can't wait to see what you've got next. Keep up the good work!

Hey I'm really enjoying this story so far. I normally don't like Sayori routes, as I find them too boring. Don't get me wrong, I really do like her as a character. Everyone should have someone like her as a friend. But every story I read with her as the love interest was just completely boring to me. However, the way you're writing this appears to be leading up to what could possibly be an actual interesting Sayori-centric romance, should it go that route.

I like all of the Dokis, honestly. Sayori is a little ray of sunshine, and I'm always happy to see her overcome her depression. Natsuki is adorable once her tsundere shell is cracked. Yuri... okay, while I do like how polite and refined she can be, she honestly freaks me out. Self harm is really, really weird to me, and she gets WAY too obsessive. However, when she's not being freaky she is actually a rather pleasant person. Your characterization of her is rather enjoyable. Honestly though, Monika is my personal favorite. So I'm really hoping she remains good friends with Harry, at least.

One thing that I'm really confused about, though. Why does Harry hate Dumbledore so much? It looks like it goes a lot further back than when he attacked him in Belgium. Sure, the guy can be a bit creepy and manipulative, but i don't recall any reason why he hates him so much. Is it because Dumbledore didn't do anything about Harry's circumstances? Did he side with, or actually aid the Potters? Also, how did Harry get the scar and horcrux when his parents are still alive? Wasn't his mother's death the murder that fit the terms for making a horcrux?

Sorry if I'm nitpicking a little. As I already said, I'm enjoying this so far. The fact I'm actually wondering about these details, and eagerly awaiting how they get answered is a good sign of that, at least in my case. I'm definitely following! Also, yikes, this is a long review!

This story's really good. I love Harry's characterization, how he's just the right mix of badass (taking over Draco's position, especially) and light-hearted (and angry, unsure teenager). The foolish Dumbledore bit is something I could have done without but so long as he dies quickly I don't have problem with it. I'm really curious though, did Harry manage to get some revenge on his parents or was he happy just by not having to deal with them? Were his parents under the influence of something malicious or just the unexplained-asshole-disease that gets to them in Alive!Potters fics?

I want you to know that I have never played DDLC. But your story has still captured my interest very well.