Your Feedback/Grading for Assignment #10

Examiner: Lo

Grade: 20/20 - O (Outstanding)

Feedback: I want to smush my precious sons with love dammit. This had me cackling at several different points. I love Piers' uncertainty which is just beautifully fleshed out here, and I love how casually Dudley mentions that he knew the whole time. (and hi i see that saura reference and ily) The concept isn't unique but you've made the mistletoe trope completely your own, so the originality still comes through. I love the interaction between Piers and Dudley. I love that Dudley could read Piers so well, and I love that their history mattered to Dudley, and I love everything about their friendship. Flow is good. Even with the scene breaks I didn't have any issues getting pulled out of the narrative, and pacing is well done. Dialogue and prose are balanced naturally. The fic is centered around the prompt. The prompt is fucking adorable and especially with the unrequited aspect you made it your own. Plot is engaging throughout and I saw no plot holes. I definitely enjoyed this fic immensely. There's a lot of humour and moments that make me smile, but there's also a lot of emotion to it that makes it even better. At one point you wrote "lead" instead of "led" but otherwise I saw no SPaG issues, so nothing worth marking down. Prompt is in the AN and fic is within WC.

This was a pretty good story. Don't see much with Dudley's gang and I like how real it was here. I mean you see so many stories where the straight guy falls in love like that when kissed blah blah blah but I mean if you're straight but your friend is coming onto you, you have to be honest. I like how they remained friends despite this. Nice job.