Just a tip for when the story comes back after everything with Jellal it will be resolved with him entering Fairy Tail, and staying with Ultear (for me she would be perfect with Natsu but as we will not have Natsu with Erza, Ultear and Mira I am content with having her with jellal) PS: And do Gray with Lucy and Juvia with Gajeel and Mira and Freed.

Your story is pretty good! For a retelling, it's better than some others. I can't help but feel like it's a little rushed in some parts, though. Or, maybe, it's just me that sees it that way. Anyway, it's a good work.

Oh yasss! Three-sided relationship!

Loving this story, lots of stories where it involves a younger Natsu being Igneel's heir are usually pretty shit but this is awesome

this ruined the story for me i went in expecting natsu erza which is a good pairing but then i was pleasantly surprised about sub pairing harem then here your dropping the harem after natsu strung mira along for 7 years and ultear along for 2 years just to drop them to do solo erza

Another trashy story with dialogue being inconsistent, as well as the quality of the writing itself, with pacing far too fast and a Natsu far too strong. Gildarts level from age 13? Or at least able to match him? Fuck off.

Great chapter looking forward to the next one

He isn’t much if one attack exhausts him... ._.

It's great you updated it, bro! I love how your story is going! Erza complaint being called 'princess', technically, she's really a Princess lol. Princess of Dragons. XD

Interesting stuff looking forward to more

Buffing the bad guys sounds good; just remember the small details in WHY they're different.

Que bien yo adoro el NatZa así por mi bien! :3

This style is nice too. I would love the traveling vibe of fairy tail

can’t wait for the next chapter. this was a great story

This is a great story! I love how romantic the dance was. Keep up the good work!