That was really nice! I enjoyed reading it a lot. You are consistent with your characters and made their development believable. Good job!

My 2 cents would be to spend a little more time creating the world around your characters. No need to dedicate pages to environment, but sometimes it was hard to visualize where the characters exactly were and how they were interacting with their surroundings. I'll have to check out your other works! Keep writing!

This should totally be part of the Manga

This deserves so many more reviews that it is surreal. You did an amazing job exploring the theory that Dabi is Touya in a feasible and realistic manner and dealt with the consequences of such a fact extremely well! You even managed to keep things in line with canon, with Izuku still being the hero of the series without being the protagonist. I did not know how much I needed this story until I read it. Hats off to you!

Congratulations on bringing your story to a conclusion. (at times it's depressing thinking how many fine stories never make it this far). And this is a good point to end this story.

As far as filling in the backstory goes, I'd say you did a credible job, given the limited information available. (as I've said it before, at this point if Horikoshi ever reveals that the entire Dabi/Touya Todoroki thing has been nothing more than a massive misdirection on his part then a lot of people are going to be upset with him)

Finally one last snarky comment: I can see the knife boot, but why a flame thrower? Doesn't Hatsume realize that the man literally IS as walking flame thrower? (of course trying to understand the mind of Mei Hatsume could probably qualify as a road to madness, so I should probably quit while I'm ahead)

A Hatsume prosthetic leg would probably be able to do Touya's ass-kicking for him. Unfortunately since it would probably also be capable of transforming him into a jet fighter or a submarine (assuming it didn't blow up halfway through the process) the prison guards would probably insist on confiscating it in order to keep him from escaping.

Actually prison may be the safest place for Touya so long as Shigiraki remains at large. Presumably it has barriers which would prevent Korogiri from opening a portal, so all he has to worry about the guards and the other prisoners attempting to slit his throat while he sleeps.

Rei's confession at the end may have been a little over the top but only because she appears to have developed her own version of Midoriya's "word vomit" problem. Touya's response was the best way to put an end to her torrent of self-recrimination (cut her off mid-sentence), and probably would have come more quickly if his mobility wasn't limited by his crutch.

"My feet moved faster than my brain" - where have we heard that one before.

I guess this answers the question of what Shigiraki meant by "if it actually works." Raises some interesting questions about his decay quirk, such as how quickly it acts and how it spreads, although there's a good chance that Overdrive lacks the ability to use it as effectively as Shigiraki.

This is sooo sad!

I really like the way Touya gives Midoriya the Reason You Suck speech, calling him out on his disgust of Touya's scars. Anyone would be frustrated at that. He even sets Midoriya's shirt on fire!

Touya also seems compeltely willing to get kids killed for his revenge now, which sours the sympathetic feelings I had towards him. ) Hopefully Shoto can crawl out of this cycle of abuse.

Sounds like Midoriya may be starting to copy All Might's mannerisms. Fortunately the worst self-inflicted injury likely to result from this behavior is likely to be strained facial muscles from maintaining that reassuring smile while delivering corny sound bites that are supposed to make everyone feel safe.

So much happens between these two here! There's been a lot of lead-up to this moment between Shoto and Touya, and the dialogue between the two is really exciting. I hope this means that Touya can have something of a happy ending, he really deserves it.

I will say, you handle the first-person POV really well. There are only a few points where it's used here, but each one is so fantastic and gives a real sense of Touya's character and motivations. I really like that.

[He had no ill feelings toward her, since he was aware that our old man had pushed her to the point of breaking.] - oof. This was a good line and gave an interesting mix between how both brothers see her actions but also the difference between how long they would have been exposed to the fallout of their parents' relationship.

"You’re making an awful lot of assumptions, little brother." - liked this piece of dialogue, as well as how you mix it in with Touya's thought process about what has happened. This was also great - "I’d given into the hope that this could end in something other than tragedy". The discomfort with the idea of being confined followed by the reference to the hospital room was well done.

[I may have followed you here, but that doesn’t mean I’m ready to play hero like a good boy.
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So that means keeping that freckled brat quiet about me.]

You give him some excellent lines. The plan is an intriguing one, I can see there being some big obstacles coming up for them, but the idea of the brothers working together is an exciting one as both of them will have to shift from their current moral compass to do so. [I hoped that he’d say no... I wanted him to stay the innocent, pure child that I swore to protect with my life so many years ago.] - this was an excellent passage, leading into a great last line. Oooo, I can't predict where you're going to take this and who's going to stray further from their path!

[Darkness. Silence. The total lack of any sensory information from anywhere left me feeling uneasy.] – ooo, I liked this opening. The lack of awareness of Shoto, nor anything else in his surroundings, no how much time had passed would be unsettling.

[I set my right hand ablaze and advanced towards the green-haired brat.] - Liked both Touya’s reaction to the person who had just saved him, and the fact that he called him a brat in the midst of it. The brutality of just burning Compress to dispose of the person who knew was well done, so simple but such a strong distinction between Dabi’s mindset and the mindset of Shoto’s brother.

"Don't you get it? This isn't going to be some storybook happy ending!” – you give Touya the best lines. Loved both this one, as well as this bit – "You're going to regret handling it this way, little hero. Killing him would have been far easier than what you're about to let happen."

[Shoto gestured for me to come with him. This was my last chance. The fork in the road that would dictate how the rest of my life would play out. I could avoid so much pain by walking away from this and destroying the last remnants of my past. Or I could follow the only remaining light from those dark times and still risk losing it all.]

Ahh! I adore this! Crossroad moments are always a weakness for me, and this was done excellently. Interesting use of avoiding pain by walking away, as likely it would be repeating a process he’s already gone through when he first left. Particularly loved the phrasing of “destroying the last remnants of my past” and “follow the only remaining light from those dark times”.

["Oh, this wasn't him. It was his fault though, he pushed her over the edge." Shoto traced the edges of his burned skin as he spoke.] – woah! That hurt.

Wow, finding out that Shoto's mother gave him the burn was pretty shocking. At first I was trying to figure out how she had done it - I wondered if it was in fact an ice burn, but I didn't think they would scar in the same way. That moment, when Shoto tells us that even his mother hurt him, feels like such a betrayal.

But I'm glad that Touya and Shoto have had the chance to reconcile their past. I can only hope that Shoto has the chance to leave his home now, or that their parents can split. Either way, this feels like a turning point for Touya's life.

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“Todoroki Touya is dead, kid. He died a long time ago.” - the bluntness of this line was excellent. Poor Shoto - liked the details of the trembling and the clenched fists as he tried to get Touya to admit who he was.

[I’ve spent ten years living in the darkness, thriving in it, avoiding all the emotions that had only caused me pain in the past. Compassion, empathy, they were all of no use to me.] - enjoyed the combination of emotive language in the first part of this (the thriving in the darkness) mixed with the dismissal of the emotion in in the second half. [“At least it wasn’t because I had gotten sloppy with covering my tracks,” I said dryly.] - I liked this, the sarcastic appreciation for the effort Shoto had put in was good.

[“As far as why I’d look for you, I remembered something I had promised myself when I realized everything you had sacrificed for me. If I was ever given the chance to find you one day, I wanted to be sure that I could be the one to protect and save you from whatever situation you were in. This is the reason I want to be a hero, Touya. To make sure that no one else ever has to suffer alone the way you must have suffered. This is my chance to save you, Touya.”] - loved all of this. The selflessness of his goal being to simply bring his brother home, just beautiful. Ah that ending!