When I first started reading this fic, I was disappointed because it wasn’t the kind I was searching for, but it looked intriguing so I continued to read. I’m glad I did because I fell in love with this story! It’s very cool and I love it! Good job!

This is a pretty good story. Like the birth of Sarada here.

This was Sasuke's perspective. It was fun to read this and kinda exciting because I wasn't expecting it.
There's a part of it that's from Sakura's perspective. When the dream sequence starts, it jumps from Sasuke's narration to Sakura's. It was a little jarring to me because there was no sign of a POV change (like a line or something to break up the text) so I was confused for a little bit. The dream sequence is good. I like that her struggles aren't just about what happened with Sasuke. I like that you captured the "what if" of the Suna mission. What if she didn't get the antidote in time? What if she didn't save Chiyo? It's not just for us, the readers. I think Sakura felt the rush of this what if too, that night when she returned to Suna to rest.
My favourite part has to be when Sasuke says "dream of winning my battles against Naruto". That has so much weight to it because he's basically admitting to wondering how things would be if he killed Naruto. The way he said it made me think there were some desire to this wondering as well.
Oh, and I love how you referenced Sasuke's mismatched eyes because of I find it hilarious.

Thanks for posting!

I think your writing is fine. I like the imagery behind Sakura's nightmares. They're well put together.
The big thing that didn't work for me is that there's no inciting incident. I kept reading and waiting for it to happen, but I got to the end and it didn't. I feel like this takes a little bit away of my investment in the story because I don't get the feeling "X happened, I need to read the next chapter to see what will happen". In this first chapter all I get is the present state: Sasuke is traveling with Sakura and she gets lots of nightmares because of the war and Sasuke. This is good in itself because it's extremely likely this would be the case and I love angst. However, I need to get hooked by an inciting incident in order to be like "I can't wait for what's next". I see you posted another 2 chapters, so I'm gonna assume the inciting incident is there, but I personally think there should be something of it at least in the first chapter.
Technical wise, you're good. Grammar and formatting and sentence structure. You have a little bit of a problem with punctuating dialogue. The dialogue tag and the line itself are separated by a comma, not a period. You can easily google this stuff, so no problem.

Story wise, I liked the way you portrayed Sasuke and Sakura. Their reactions are on point. However, I do believe Sasuke telling Sakura he loves her was a little bit too soon. They haven't been travelling for long and in my opinion Sasuke feels so guilty about what happened and that there's so much left unsaid between the two of them that he wouldn't think that far in terms of his feelings. He's still jagged after Naruto snapped him out of his darkness. "I care for you" would have worked better for me, but it's your story and if you think there's a good reason for him to say it this soon, there probably is.

Thanks for writing and posting the chapter/story.

oh yess! this is soo good! it worth to read. i'll be waiting for sequel! i hope it would be happy ending

You write rather well, especially for your first story

I really loved this! Is amazing! You know how to write it with emotion! Good job!

Wow, I really felt a stone in my chest just reading this that only got bigger and bigger. Great writing! I really felt a sense of dread everytime Sakura refused to get help in any kind. I really just wanted to shake her silly and tell her to accept help.

Man, Sasuke with the blush is always a pleasure to read.

Thanks for posting this!