Can't say I like how you've taken away Severus's prowess in brewing, and given it to your female OC instead. You've also dumbed him down into a fumbling idiot who forgets to carry his wand when going to meet his two primary tormentors of the last five years. Sure, Snape is still just a teen at this point, and not the seasoned spy we see in canon, but I seriously doubt he was ever a naïve child, considering his abusive father and the tough neighborhood he grew up in.

It just seems to me that you've severely hacked his character in order to bolster your rather weak construct of an OC.

Wrong spell for the bogart, it's riddikulus n not rictemsempra

Wonderful story, I cannot wait for a sequel. Would you be able to update this story with a A.N when the sequel is up?

Great chapter!

Granger is soooo annoying! Great chapter though!

This is a wonderful story, I cannot wait for more.

Great chapter!

family tiff

heartwarming ending

Manipulative Dumbledore! I really like this story so far.

Well, that was really sad. I feel it would have been better to have Harry secretly survive and have that be hidden. It's a little too sad. Thank you for the story.

i really like what you're doing with the story and am excited to see where it'll go

I feel so bad for the both of them and to have not only to lose a mother but to lose of your partner is rough that is the most saddest part of the story besides having Cassandra Marked but can’t wait for more

Happy Valentine's Day! 3333 it so far!

Poor Alice an poor Elaine and Severus