CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER IN THIS STORY

Hey, Good job man! I really like the way this is going! Keep it up! I'm partially curious though... how do you guys write so much? 50,000 words at 9 chapters? That's ridiculous! It's not filler, either, there's actually something going on! There's content! How do you do it? I need to know!

Hey there buddy! You've got a great story going on here. But there are a few things you can do to make it better!

For one, when a new person talks, then make a new paragraph. Even if there a sentence long it makes it much easier for the reader (And makes your story a little longer). It's an easy fix you can do for all your chapters and will make everything a whole lot easier.

Secondly, try adding more detail to what you're writing. Such as describing what a spell looks like. What town you're in, what do characters look like? This makes it better for the reader to comprehend what's happening.

That's it for now, keep up the good work and if you need any help just PM me!

Thank you for this really good story dude

Please fix your writing style, some paragraphs are very long and some sentences are hard to read.

Great chapter

YAH FAIRY TALE

Great chapter

Great chapter! Keep up the great work

Great chapter

Awesome chapter

Love what your doing keep it up

Great chapter

Great chapter.

Great start