superb story update soon.

I love this story. Please make more

Love it. Keep up the good work!

Wonderful fic!
The scene where natsu is cooking was nice now I m hungry..!

Thx I really enjoying the story so far. Cant wait to read the arc your making

Look, Gray blushed with Juvia (if it's Gruvia arriving in the story I love you) and I honestly think you could make Natsu open up and reveal to Erza, Mira and Makarov about him, so we wouldn't have that cliche from after Tenrou he having to regain the trust of the guild (which is a pretty boring cliche) especially from Erza so he could act as a double agent for Makarov just like Gajeel does with Raven Tail it would be interesting if he instead of seeing a spy from Hades he reveal Hades' secrets to Makarov (as they would forgive him since he was created like that by Hades) and in the guild he would be really loved and would have real friends.
Ps
S: Honestly this personality irritates him a little, he looks like a spoiled muleke gets mad about anything.

(Chapter 17)
Oh lord, I thought you would learn. But it seems the more advice I give you the worst your story gets.

First of all, you need to learn how to build up dialogue and drama. You go through about 10 emotions in the span of 2 sentences.

Your Natsu is pathetic. One second, he is heartless and the next he is a 5-year old crybaby.

Like really? Cover your ears? The guy only said one bad word... This is beyond cringe.

I have given this story too many chances and frankly I am done with it. Your fic is plain garbage.

P.S
- Create a new fic and I can help you come up with a great idea instead of this trash.

Only half way, but I hate the chapter so far.

You are writing solely for the choice of plot armor. The team has nothing but talk shit behind his back and collect the rewards for doing nothing. And you have Natsu (dark mage) forgive them? Instantly?

I really like your work but the quality of this chapter so far is horrific. Please take more time and read your chapters before uploading, because this is getting bad.

Update please

I don't really know where you are going with this story(Which is a good thing) but I have a feeling that Mira isn't going to be the one to tell everyone about Natsu... it'll happen after he's been "converted" over to the good side and Hades will be the one to reveal that Natsu was with Grimore.

fuck don’t ruin this story. isn’t natsu suppose to be dark, ewwwww.

ur making him take all this shit-talking from erza and gray and he does nothing.

ur mc is a fucking pussy who fucking kills random people one second then see’s himself in some blind kid? cry me a fucking river.

this is edgy asf and natsu is a fucking lame for letting TEAM ERZA say a bunch of shit to him and he does nothing in return.

so through all this thick and thing, natsu is back to his flamboyant and masochist self. wow, lame.

I liked that Natsu found the child, he can soften his heart, and something tells me that the character that Erza gave information to is the traitor.

Glad we don't have Edolas, the only good thing about that bow was Erza.K so we will soon go to Tenrou (I'm curious to know what will make Natsu betray Hades to help Fairy Tail) and I want to see how the relationship between Erza with Natsu (which I think will only happen after 7 years)
Ps: Dude makes Gray have a relationship with Lucy or Juvia (I love Gruvia)

I am loving this story, I read it in an hour. I couldn’t put it down how much I enjoyed it. You are one of my favorite new authors on Fanfiction, keep writing the story you want to write, I’m enjoying everything. I’m so curious as to who Natsu ends up with, it’s clear he’s got an attraction to Erza but Mira is more bold and gentle and if she comes out of the coma forgiving, I really think that’s going to be what wins his heart.

Damn this chapter was intense, lets see how long this poison will hold