Interesting

I love it and can’t wait to see what is next for NARUTO

Awesome stuff man,simply brilliant can't wait to see what happens next so please update soon as possible thanks. Ps please make the chapters a little longer thanks. This story has unlimited potential to be totally awesome,so please keep up the awesome work and keep updating thanks.

Errr, this is ... pretty bad.
Sorry, but will elaborate.
First of all, structure. You mix dialogue with regular text. Damn, just look at your own story, it is hard to read, with everything mashed up into huge blocks of text. There is a remedy though. Start from a new line when a person speaks. You will instantly see the difference.
Cliches. You started the story with Naruto being chased and beaten by an angry mob. That is literally the worst way to start a story. First of all it is overused. Two, it is plain lazy. Three, it makes no sense at all. Four it ruins the world, as it reduced people to angry morons. Naruto's drama was one of loneliness and the real tragedy came from how unavoidable it was. The actions and reactions of people in the universe made sense. In an angry mob cliche they do not.
Akumo ... right, an out of nowhere guy who is an Uzumaki, saves Naruto, hoes and yells at Hiruzen with every line being another cliche. Umm, a guy barges into homages office, threatens people around ... he is dead. Literally he should be dead with half the ANBU force being there cutting him to ribbons.
Actually considering that almost nothing makes sense I am not sure what to even point out.
Lines in all upper case letter. Seriously that is annoying. Fine, I understand when someone truly grand happens. An explosion, a tailed beast roaring, that can be in all upper case letters. Here ... a guy screamed. There is an exclamation mark for that, it is more than enough. And if you want more emphasis on how loud and angry some one is ... then writing how loud and angry someone is!
Pacing is rushed, there are little to no details.
Seriously, did you work on this? It just feels like there wasn't much effort put into the first chapter. It is made up of overused illogical cliches.

nice so far