Oh dear...

This is pretty good. Keep up the good work

...Ah shit. Well, that’s bad timing on a roll

Oh...my god! This is where things are going to get in from 0-100 (and it's rare that Lori is upset at anything). Also I do note that you have done your homework on stand up terms, which will help the new reader out a lot.

I was being constructive when I writes this in this review... You gotta checked your spellings twice. I saw many words that are losing some important alphabet to make it understandable.

Now the harsh critic is over, its time for goods. Like I said in last review of mine, this story is really good. I love the characters, they are not like in canon but at least, they still a child at heart.

Lincoln, Luan and Lynn seems closer now, and I like that. So please, if this story is Loudcest, just say it. I won't mind if this Loudcest, in fact, I would love it even more.

Now, blue materials? I like that. I just hope I can read it when Lincoln tells that to his sisters, Luan, Lynn and Lucy. But you do you. At least it still interesting to read what they talking about.

So Lori is alone? Figured. In "Garage Banned" it has been proved, she couldn't live by herself, alone without her siblings, because that is just Lori for you.

I like that I get so many vibes that Lincoln is a stud. He has so many girl friends, I've thoughts they were his girlfriends for real. And I like that the character is Polly and Jordan, I love the two girl, hope many more authors would writes about them with Lincoln Loud.

Anyway, this story is really great, and I hope you make some spellcheck. I told you this because a good story needs help. And I was your help. XD, that sound super wrong.

Keep up the good work :)

Aaahhh:-). Perfect job! Oh

Six? Oh, his five older sisters plus Lucy.

I will keep an eye on this. Its great. Lincoln doing stand up comedy that mocks his sisters. This will most likely cause friction between them. It might also expose his sisters making them reevaluate themselves because they are far from perfect. Atleast thats what i can gleam from the Drama category. Of course there is the title that promises heavy on the emotional front .

Okay this is actually a very interesting take on the Loud House. From the episodes I've seen...I now half-expect something to go wrong against all involved, especially including Lincoln.

First of all, I don't see many M-rated material in this starter, but please, you rate whatever you think suit.

And for another, I fav this story :)
Really, its a joke that I think would be funnier hearing than reading but still, made me laugh for a moment.

I love that Lincoln not doint something a teenager would do in their room, what with his sweaty and all. Really made me thinking he was doing some slapping flesh (get it?)

Anyway, back to the fact.
Lincoln is not a pervert, I mean, he is grown up in fiction, but not just because he is older, he could do something perverted.
So good job.

At first, I thought this would be Lincoln hate Luan fic.
What with her signed him up without his permission.
Its kinda hipocrite of her actually.

She often says in "Making The Case" episode.
Make sure you got their permission first before you do anything with the material that has them in it.

But I was wrong.
Luan is pretty loveable in this chapter.
Hope it would stay that way.

Lynn is a tough nut to crack.
By my words, she kinda confusing to read.
I thought she was mad at him for "Period" joke.
But then she blew him, I mean blew a raspberry on him.

Its cute actually.
If this story takes turn into Loudcest.
I hope you do cute, adorable moments and scenes between Lincoln and Luan and Lynn, instead of Lemon/Smut.

I also love that Jordan and Polly somewhat have a crush on him. If Lynn's words is any indicater.

Good job.
Keep up the good work :)
I fav this story.