Oh joy another basement dweller wants to ruin another story with their sick SI sex fantasies

So in the end he Burma is dating yamcha? And here I though this wil be a good fanfiction, the mc is a complete loser

Swing how they are twins I want to see they fusion form and strengh

I just realized you copied many paragraphs from another fanfiction called Dragon Ball Redux. What a loser.

This was already bad, but ignoring Roshi's training to follow bulma? No wonder you dropped this shit

Thanks for the chapter. Great work!

WAY too much talk about tails ...

Now he can ask Bulma's father to create a gravity room for him

I've read you other works and have enjoyed most of them, however in this fic so much of canon is forced and unnecessary, so much so that it's aggravating. In dbz most of early canon can be disregarded, the only thing that meaningfully carries forward are gravity training and senzu beans.

Additionally if the MC didn't want Yamcha to see bulma that could have been way too easily done. Too much panty humor, wanting to see pussy, the MC has the desire and ability to do things but doesn't. It's frustrating.

Plus Bulma is excessively annoying in this fic.

update more

... why would he cuck his own brother tho his reasoning could all be fixed he really just wanted a reason to take chichi

Why did he cut goku’s tail the third time there’s no point

I won't be surprised if Baali ever decides to cripple the Pilaf gang, primarily Pilaf. Wait a minute! I don't remember Baali agreeing to marry Chi Chi.

strategically retreating from an angry woman is not running away I don't care what anyone else says

Honestly the grammar for this story is like a 4/10 and the lowest I think i've ever read are 5/10.
At first I wasn't sure if I could handle reading it with the grammar how it is, but the story itself makes up for it to a great degree.

I only hope that the story doesn't go this slow the whole time, no problem with the current pacing.. But I can't imagine reading through the Red Ribbon Army arc at this speed...