Interesting story and I like it! *Thumbs UP!* Please continue the story, the excitement thrills me!

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Another Arkos hater I see.

*shakes head*

And they keep coming up with the same arguments that are just not valid.

Him not knowing who she was, lead to her being hopeful that she'd finally be able to have a friend. (See Penny Poledina for similar issues.)

Any attraction was merely a minor crush based on thinking him kinda cute.

How is this any different from Weiss & Neptune being attracted to each other due to appearance?

Or how about Blake and Sun?

Or Blake admiring Yang's hair and Yang the Bellabooty.

Hell, this pretty much applies to ANY relationship where individuals meet for the first time and think the other party attractive.

It's the time she spent with him that made her fall for him and the Dance pretty much clinched it. That he'd willingly make himself look foolish just to keep his word and put a smile on her face.

Those two, if they'd gotten over that initial hump of will they/won't they, tend to be the type of personalities who'd end up celebrating their 60th/70th or even 80th wedding anniversary*. Health and other factors allowing.

You just don't see that any more with the younger generations these days.

So yeah, just keep insisting that it was shallow and make yourself look silly doing so.

*: Knew a couple like that or more specifically was a friend of the Missus, who saw me as this younger sibling/nephew mix.

Hubby was just as dense as Jaune was, till he nearly lost her due to a drunk driver. Which made him realize how much she meant to him. They celebrated their 70th wedding anniversary in IIRC 2007, kinda lost track of them in late 2010, early 2011 due to issues in my own life. So no idea what's up with them these days.

*shrugs*

The hell so in the same chapter you have the guy call jaune a baby and re-enact a baby scene of grasping his fingers then turn him into a child the next couple paragraphs down. F this shit I'm out.

Seven months old not years. Seven years old is a full grown child not a baby. Same mistake in the summary as well.

Pyrrha only liked Jaune only because he didn't know who she was, when you really get down to it Arkos is really shallow.

Comments:

- Overall
Not that many changes all round, although meeting and befriending Pyrrha prior to the locker room is liable to pay big dividends later.

Also thank you Owen and Cattleya for teaching him about sarcasm. So we're not going to have to put up with Jaune chasing after a ... Well.. Early seasons Weiss.

That's about as polite as I can put it.

*shrugs*

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Corrections:
*... looking at the school being amazes of the place.*

"amazed"

*Only if you get only you motion sickness." Yang chuckled.*

"get over" not "get only"

*It's still amazing you got into Beacon two years earlier, Ruby."*

"early" not "earlier".

*Jaune complimented on his second childhood friend's achievement.*

Nuke "on", not really needed there.

*Guys, I appreciate the confident, but I just want to ...*

"confidence" not "confident".

*Yang walked away catching up a few people she knows.*

Tweak to:
"Yang walked away, catching up to a few people she knew."

*... and to see there are any good spots to hang out if they ever free time.*

Tweak to:
"... and to see if there are any good spots to hang out if they ever have any free time."

*But the walk was short live when Ruby felt her foot bump into something, and it drop to the ground.*

Tweak to:
"But the walk was short lived, when Ruby felt her foot bump into something and it dropped to the ground.'

*"I should have! *

"would" rather than "should".

*The girl angered as she picks up her glass jars and suitcase.*

"argued" rather than "angered".

*... as she suddenly sneeze from the Dust cloud, ...*

"sneezed".

*... onto Weiss and little on Jaune too.*

"... and a little ..."

*One bottle roll across the ground until it stops a foot of a girl with a black bow who picks it up and saw the commotion over there.*

Tweak to:
"One bottle rolled across the ground, until it stopped at the foot of a girl with a black bow, who picked it up and saw the commotion over there."

*... then I guess all that hard work must've damage her brain along the way."*

"damaged".

*Weiss smiled smuggling.*

"smugly" rather than "smuggling", which has a very different meaning.

*The same company infamous for its controversial labor forces and questionable business partners."*

Tweak to:
"The same company is infamous for its controversial labor force practices and questionable business partners."

*This got Weiss upset that she couldn't think of any words to talk back on that comment, even though deep down she might right about that, she just grabs the bottle and her walk away with her suitcase.*

Tweak to:
"This got Weiss so upset that she couldn't think of any retorts to that comment, even though deep down she knew the other girl might be right about what sge said, so she just grabbed the bottle and walked away with her suitcase in tow."

*Blake revealed her name and walk away.*

"walked" not "walk".

*... let just focus on getting into Beacon and worry about her later." Jaune stated.*

"let's" rather than "let".

*Jaune and Ruby walk around a little longer ...*

" walked".

*... then the blonde knight bump into someone.*

"bumped"

*Guess that's one way to meet new people you never met before."*

"... people you've never ..."

*... or even hear of me?" *

"... or have even heard of me?"

*The girl cheered.*

Add "mentally" after "cheered".

*... and similar height to Jaune.*

"... and of similar".

*She also equipped with a bronze bracer capable connecting her shield and spear.*

Tweak to:
"She's also equipped with a bronze bracer capable of connecting with her shield and spear."

*No, Ruby really did explode because she squeezed on some Dust." Jaune vouched.*

Tweak to:
"No, Ruby really did explode due to sneezing on some Dust." Jaune vouched."

*Oh my, nobody was hurt, right?" Pyrrha concerned.*

"Pyrrha asked in a concerned tone."

*... that Ruby and the others could barely keep it.*

"... keep up with."

*... her graduated top of her class at Sanctum!" Weiss bragged.*

"... she graduated ..."

*Has this fool not watch TV?*

"watched" not "watch".

*Well, that doesn't really matter who you are.*

Replace "that" with "it".

*Jaune accepted and they walk together leaving a shock Weiss.*

"walked away" rather than "walk".

though it wasn't mentioned but it was weiss fault waving dust vial with faulty seal rubys face to spread the dust she sneezed and exploded some how even though that doesn't make sense

also take that weiss jaune got pyrrha first
also speaking of weiss you didn't do her look intro

Amazing story so looking forward to reading future chapters

- Readership
Never did get why people complain about the pairing(s) in a story, when it's clearly marked as containing said pairing from the word go.

The sensible thing to do is avoid reading the story in the first place, rather than to whine about it.

- Skills
So has Jaune learned any blacksmithing from his adoptive mom?

Would've been another way to exercise his upper body, way to further bond with her and make it easier to maintain his gear. Plus, a useful backup plan for a living, in case he suffers a career ending injury.

Plus a certain Amazon needs an actual set of armour, not something designed for tournaments and being a pinup.

I have a good feeling about this story please continue

I would love this if you just got rid of Pyrrha from the relationship, have it just be Cattleya, Pyrrha just feels like an add on, I get it Arkos is popular, but that doesn't mean it's needed or even wanted in every Jaune fic. Having Arkos just ruins this for me.

Liking the story, it's cool and still cook food for his friends at Beacon in the future.

I like how this goes and I hope Jaune keeps his aura amplification semblace and if you don't want him to use too much, you can make him discover recently

Wonder who Jaume will meet at Beacon? keep up the good work.

no dont add the other kid lols (unless genderbent) how is jaune supposed to somehow end up with his adopted mom if she has a son after owens gone (i guess dead she can't end up with jaune if he just missing she look for him with her son)
im curious if your later adding his sisters or any rwby series milfs since the other girls like rwby pn etc are obviously in