Hope you will continue this story Im really liking it

Good job liked it as always

Ain't Ami Mask a monster? Like Lola but he retains his humanity by having strict standards for heroes and himself?

The kiss scene are kinda unnecessary and just there to just add drama for drama sake

Hero S rank

Glad to see this fanfic continuing. Hope to see more.

The story is really good and I hope you don’t give up on it...

The whole kissing thing and subsequent forgiveness was shit. Both from a writing perspective and from a reader perspective, it was terrible.

You had the whole build up of Lola being in love with Saitama and how she liked his passionate side in chapter 8, so when Amai offered the twenty times pay increase, I thought it would be a scene where she still rejects him and reaffirms her love regarding her husband. After all, a twenty increase pay is a cheap thing, especially in the face of love, but noooo. Instead, you did something completely and utterly stupid. Lola kissing him was out of character and completely strayed from the narrative that you had previously established.

The family having money problems wasn't even highlighted, nor emphasized at all in the story, leading up to chapter ten. Sure, Lola loses her job, but the family has Genos's rent money, so it's not even an issue. In fact, the only reason why Lola went to a photoshoot was because she was bored, not because she needed the cash. Instead of sticking to things that you established beforehand, you made up a compeltely seperate issue with Saitama refusing to use Genos's money for some innane reason that you have yet to even explain.

It was random, done for the sake of cheap drama and nothing more. The resolution in this chapter didn't make it any better. Your cheap drama didn't even garner any good resolution. Even if in the future, Saitama meets up with Amai, there won't be a heated conflict like what most fans would have wanted/expected from this trainwreck of a narrative. Saitama's completely lax attitude ruins any future conflict regarding this issue. If knowing his wife kissed another man won't even get a rise out of him, seeing the man that she kissed probably won't do anything either. If you do make him show any emotion, it will once again go against something you previously established. You'll turn Saitama into a robot whose emotions you can flick on and off at your leisure. It's all completely hollow and meaningless.

In the first place, Amai wouldn't even be a good antagonist for this type of thing. He might have offered the increased pay, but he didn't coerce her into kissing him or even act creepy about it. She did it out of her own volition. The reader can't even hate justifiably hate Amai, because it was all Lola's fault.

And that's probably the most important issue of all. You ruined Lola's character. Reading the previous chapters, one of the things you emphasized the most was her love and loyalty for Saitama. That was one of her most defining character traits. Case in point, Saitama lets her work at a carbaret club because he trusts her. So, that's why the kiss scene was not only terrible, but it was also a surprise. It went against everything you previously established about her character. What happened to all that love, all that loyalty? Is money really all it takes? Would she have sex with someone if someoned paid her enough money?

What's more, you used this stupid scene to hint at the fact that Amai is actually a monster in disguise. You emphasized how kissing him felt hollow, not like the warmth she felt when she kissed Saitama. This would have been nice, but your bullshit foreshadowing ruined what little SaitamaxLola fluff this scene contained. Instead of it being a contrast regarding a kiss with her husband and a kiss with a stranger, it became a contrast regarding a kiss with a human and a kiss with an emotionless monster. So, if Amai had been a normal human, would she have felt the same warmth she felt from Saitama? Would any guy do for her? Does she even love saitama at all? You opened up a can of worms the moment you let the kiss play out.

In short, You shat the bed and completely ruined my favorite character in this story. I don't know about other people, but this story is now completely unreadable. For future readers, I recommend going no further than chapter 9.

The only reason why I'm even commenting on this is because I can't yell at you in real life and I needed to vent.

Lola deserved better.

WHEN CAN THEY HAVE A BABY!?

The drama was not my cup of tea...
Too cheap for my liking.
A kiss out of the blue for money?
Couldve built it up more by showing the financial crisis of the family but no. Its an instant kiss with instant forgiveness no less. Show the inner conflict. Wheres the tears of guilt? Wheres the sweet sweet sweeet taste of guilty tears and righteous fury?
Its almost like the movie Through night and day.
Cheap drama. But I digress, as a writer you cant please everyone, and you really shouldnt. But you really should have built up the drama more. Otherwise its like hentai..cheap drama for kinkiness and almost no plot.

Nice.

Can we please see Lola's true form and Saitama's reaction to her? My guess is that he won't care she's a monster.

I like.

Eeey, It's nice to see this fic up and running again. The pacing really matches with the S-Class meeting with all of that juicy character interaction. The Saitama Family will always be at Saitama's back, whether the situation will change or nah. May the adventures of the married man and his family continue!

hold up! ...his wife was an ESPer? a psychic-type monster, eh? this will get interesting for sure, and wtf Genos still living in the same place as the married couple? *awkward disciple noises*

...and damn, you portrait the candy-guy somehow irritating. did he just say Saitama ugly bald guy?