please more chapters

please more chapters

I’m here

So far so amazing I love it!

I’m posting this on chapter 7 ‘cause I already posted stuff on 9 and forgot to add this. I’m loving the story but I think you’re falling into a quite dangerous cliche, your protagonist is too perfect in his interactions with other hero’s and antiheroe’s. He convince Batman to let him kill? Really? You should add more conflicts of perspective and morality, it adds more realism to the story.
This is just my constructive criticism, it’s not a demand or anything just my opinion.

I’m loving the story, but I don’t understand why you double explain everything, why do you restate everything your characters do, we can figure out everything due to the context and already quite descriptive explanations.

Great chapter here, I especially liked the fight scene and the dialogue with Batman. Anyways, I wanted to ask you a question: is Maynard an Alex or a Heller? Not in terms of personality no, but in terms of WHAT exactly they are. If Heller is a man infected with the flu then Alex IS the flu in a literal sense. So my question is: is Maynard The Flu? Or is he merely infected with it?

Pretty badass chapter, but personally I think that lately your mcs lacks of... empathy, and we readers aren't that able to relate with them( personally speaking at least, don't know about others). You should work more about their dialogues and bits of introspection that don't limit themselves to planning or killing other people. Again, personal opinion, good work.

Ok I got to say tis stop overly describing situations that people can already like that leveling the place with fire or him disembolying Kenny its already obvious

This is gold mate, why u stop?

please more chapters please more

Do I even need to tell you which paragraph was problematic? Of fcken course it's going to be the one where he started telling his story to Sharona. Unpack... Unpack what you stup*d fcker, there's a time and place for every conversation and that so clearly wasn't it.

Your mc is the kind of *sshole who answers a strangers "How are you doing" with a 20 minute conversation about how much life sucks. You're really making him hard to like.

Shouldn't it have been Virgil who found him? I thought Maynard wanted his help because it's his town and would know how to find him. Seems weird the outsider comes to town and tells the hero where his rogues gallery is.

"Because having been experimented on and and having been..." is a perfect paragraph to show what I meant in my last review. That's not a conversation, that's a speech. An oddly open and honest one. They need to show up a lot less often.

Maynard (Which is a cr*p name btw) is too preachy and open. I get some of it because he just seems like a chatty person, but I'm not sure he (Or more accurately you) know when normal conversations turn into speeches and out of place honestness. It goes over that line more than once.