This was a beautiful story. I had trouble following it a few times, but I like how everyone had a nice ending.

This epilouge was very touching and the AN in the end was very deep.
Is the Hero of Fates Corrin?

Thanks for the story. It's brought be a lot of happiness. I hope you are blessed with as much as you've given me.

It's been a fun ride. This felt a lot more polished than I would have expected from a first time writer - I was surprised to see you indicate you were new to this in the notes. Criticism (hopefully constructive) is the next few paragraphs, so feel free to skip to the last one and ignore the rest.

The ending feels a bit weak if this is indeed the final chapter. Robin, Morgan, and Aversa all make peace with their roles internally, which is fitting for a story so focused on personal demons and growth, but as laid out it doesn't give them a chance to demonstrate how they've grown in the context of the world at large. Morgan seems to get the largest platform to demonstrate her progress, with the request for Marc's name, but since none of the conflict is ever really shared with Aversa, Robin, or in later reactions to Lucina, it felt like her arc was building to a revelation that ended up being extremely self contained, as there was no one aside from Morgan that got the chance to react to her growth (or even to note that there had been growth).

Lucina and Robin's ending felt isolated and apart to me as well - while Robin developed over the course of dealing with his inner conflict - his final internal monologue about what he'd say to Lucina - how different would that have been if the Robin from the beginning of the story had found her Comatose in a field, instead of having just completed his quest? Would the lines he delivered been any different if he had ultimately failed to return with her, but simply spoken to himself to reaffirm his own goals before setting out looking for her once again?

And building on that, the end effectively returns to the status quo of the beginning of the story - Robin waiting, Lucina removed, Morgan keeping her own counsel, Aversa resigned to her position, because there has been minimal chance to demonstrate their development, as the revelations are pretty much internal to the characters and the principle motivation (reuniting Robin and Lucina, presumably) is left in kind of a Schrodinger's Cat situation that the key characters can only sort of react to. Lucina's back, but unless its setting up another arc, for me the impact is minimized because the dynamics haven't changed amongst characters and the internal changes to personalities haven't been given a chance to be on display - the reader knows they are different, but are deprived of seeing the interactions amongst the cast that would drive it all home.

Leaving Lucina in a coma also feels like it makes her a bit of a plot mcguffin - after being used to motivate the protagonist, she is returned to her pedestal and invoked no further, her purpose having been served. Which goes against the earlier passages of the story where she decidedly had firm agency.

I guess it just feels an odd end to me - seeing characters grow as the story progresses, but not really being given a chance to clearly demonstrate that growth in the world. The reader knows they've changed, but juxtapose that 'knowing' against the early scene with Gangrel - he's given a chance to demonstrate how he evolved from his canon role via interplay with Aversa and Robin, his learned humility with his desire to 'exit, stage right', and the faith that Robin has placed in him - it really helps to show how he's changed, but still keep his original nature, and all without having to keep it bottled up inside. If the goal of the story was to show individuals progressing along their own paths, and doing so via internalized epiphanies (with occasional help from Divine Dragons to provide sarcastic counterpoints), it does so quite well, but doesn't quite result in the ending I expected. After creating such a built out world with interesting characters, I really had hoped to see how the characters interacted and dealt with all that had come to pass (Lucina meeting Gangrel would have been either hilarious, awkward, or awkwardly hilarious). But Everyone wants different things from an ending, I suppose, and don't let my criticism derail or decrease your deserved satisfaction for the completion of this story.

Anyway! I greatly enjoyed your story, and thank you for taking the time to write it. I look forward to seeing what else you write moving forward.

Thanks for the read.

Thank you for writing something so enjoyable.

Quite the chapter. But I don't think we're done with Grima yet... heh heh...

Really enjoying the story, and really enjoyed how you developed the characters and had Morgan come to accept things, and how in general you developed the roles, world, and relationships outside of Robin and Lucina. It made it feel like a much more full story.

As this story/arc comes to a conclusion, assuming it does have a happy ending, I hope you'll considering going beyond that. Robin as King of Plegia with Lucina alongside him is something I'd really like to see more of, and given how you've developed the supporting cast, the interactions with the two would be fun to see.

Thanks for the reqs

Alrighty! Got off my lazy butt and started reading this story!
So chapter 1: I like the idea of the Shepherds in Plegia experimenting with leftover Risen in order to figure out how they work. Its something that has never crossed my mind and opens up a lot of future possibilities. And you did a good job showing Robin and Chrom’s friendship as well as Robin’s close relationship with little Lucina (very cute).
Chapter 2: This one really intrigued me. Morgan’s backstory is vague in game, and often times stays vague in fics. But this gave me hints of a deeper story for her than the usual. If I’m write, I’m excited to read ahead and discover more.
You’ve got some really good ideas set up here. The only issue I have, nitpicky maybe, is some of the tenses on some words seem a little off. Like using has instead of had in some instances. Nothing major and nothing that’ll keep me from reading. Overall, solid start! Excited to read more!

Seriously, your work brings me so much joy. To see you continue following this unique direction you have set up with your capabilities and being able to enrich that standard with each passing chapter is just amazing. Your characterization of Grima is easily my favourite among all works of fiction I have come across. That whole scene with the two opposing Grimas and the sharing of his ideology was a very eye opening experience. It is something that has very much been embedded in my heart and something I hope to share with people that think they have lost their ways, or apply it to myself whenever I may suffer from a hard time that I feel there is no way out of. Beautiful work my friend. I am excited to see what the future chapters hold. Best of luck!

This is seeming all so familiar, albeit with the names reversed.

Beautiful chapter. You've really done a phenomenal job at articulating the emotions felt by the characters in each situation they happen to be in. Not only that, but your way of setting the scenes and the way the events are carried out has such a distinct feel to it. Your portrayal of Grima here and his interaction with Robin was easily a true breath of fresh air and really evolved the rather lackluster and generic dynamic they had in the mainline game. That scene about Robin still not forgiving him, but giving him a chance to rest was something that could easily make it into a high quality show. And the ending about Robin finding himself in another timeline where it's his female counterpart that exists. You're really driving the one of a kind story feel here. Seriously, great job. Looking forward to reading the rest of your story!

This was a RIDE. And just when you think we're reaching a conclusion Naga throws a curveball and it's alternate timeline time! Eagerly awaiting to see where this will go.

There are still better places to take a nap than on the ground, you know...

yeah this could be bad

Naga and Grima's relationship here is honestly really fascinating, I'm a big fan of their characterization five years later in comparison to Awakening's script.