I am actually pissed off to the point of ranting. I love the majority of the chapter and I do hope to read more, I really do. But if I could I would give this chapter a Thumbs Down on principle. I have never in my LIFE seen a FIRST chapter end in a high action cliffhanger. The only thought in my head was 'ARE YOU F-ING SERIOUS!' This is the first time in my entire LIFE of reading fiction of ANY kind (and I've read some twisted Fiction) where I actually feel the need to actively find a way to defy reality to hit the Author with a cast iron Wiffle-Ball Bat. Several times. You do not end a first chapter like that. That just isn't right. Keep up the good work and I await the next chapter.

I think I’ll enjoy THE ARC your setting up

I certainly has potential and, considering I love your story "Don't tell", I can't wait to see where you take this one.

But there is one thing I have to note and please hear me out on this: Your team change makes no sense like that.

The teams on the show were created by two rules, one the students were aware of, the other one only the viewers.
1. The two people that look into each other’s eyes first are partners.
2. The aforementioned pairs pick a chest figure. The two pairs that pick the same are put on the same team.

Breaking rule no. 2 can easily be explained by Ren and Nora picking up a different chest piece or something similar that lead to the teams being created like this.

But now to the thing that really feels wrong to me. Why did you change the partners inside of team JRWP? Pyrrha and Jaune saw each other first, as did Weiss and Ruby.
Ren and Nora are still partners, as are Yang and Blake.

Starting after the speech and skipping the chess piece pickup does not simply change canon. It actually is quite the opposite for me as a reader. If something is worth skipping in the story, it is logically assumed that it is not important/nothing changed.

The way you wrote the team change so far, it just feels like "I want this change, just deal with it.".
If you want Ruby and Jaune to be partners, but only to realize it later, there are ways to do it. Maybe let them collide in air directly after launch. Due to the shock they look at each other and then Pyrrha's spear drags Jaune away and pins him to the tree. Both might assume that the test only really starts after touching the floor, which is why they walk around with Weiss and Pyrrha.
And as their assumed partners are already "taken", Weiss and Pyrrha are paired with the first free one they meet while completing the mission, each other.

Otherwise keep up the good work and would love to read more. Sorry for this long block of text.

You have to spellcheck a few words, ''Correction'' ''?Nevermore'' ''Goodwitch'' are the ones that I spotted.

Though I do hope Jaune becomes less of a idiot then his canon self

hm... I'm curious. So you made Jaune and Ruby partners instead of the usual, eh?

Interesting start and curious on what semblance Juane has that seems different from any other we've seen in the series. I enjoy ceour's work and Paul xion work on great Juane stories in .

So, this honestly is very good, very few grammar errors, and the team ups are an interesting choice as well. I'm very curious about Jaunes powers too. can't wait for the next chapter.

This seems interesting

Eh, did you accidentally write Corrosion instead of correction?

(I'm tired when I'm writing this review so sorry If I say something stupid and not understandable xD)

Hello :D
I have to say I tried watching RWBY and it's not my cup of tea, but I readed some FF's and I like most of them. (I have to see this "coeur Al'Aran)

OK LET'S GO TO ACTUAL REVIEW:
I don't like when story start's outtanowere. I like when FF start with childhood of MC or just not from middle of action and reader can learn from the start what leads MC to who he is and who he want to be.

So yea I'm not big fan of first 1/3 of this chapter, but it was still very well writed and kept me interested. The rest of chapter was good too. For me it was more of an introduction of Jaune friend's/future friends but still little rushed. Hope to see good fight from Jaune in next chapter, but If he lose I won't cry. I like when there is Long journey before getting power.

I'm happy to see you making something more serious and with long chapters.
(I love Don't tell but it's more of comedy genre story. BTW when will be new chapter? if I can ask)

It's going to be interesting adventure with this new story of yours!
See ya!

P.S.
I just remembered I rated your Don't tell chapters before you had break :P
This chapter gets - - - - 7/10 - - - -!