first of all? ethan and jesse in that abusive home? makes me so sad? :(((

also second of all! i really love how you wrote jesse's decision to become a vampire! like it makes a lot of sense, wanting to become stronger to fight back from the hurt that has been inflicted on him all those times, to protect ethan as much as he can (even more than he did before, by taking all of his beatings which ! :((((( ) etc etc. like its a really good motivation and it makes me sympathize with jesse! hopefully the rest of team v learn to trust him in the same way :')

i also love how willing ethan is to help jesse change! like he is on his friends' side but also wants to help jesse, which is a very ethan thing to do. what a pure soul :')

i'm excited for the next chapter, fanfic buddy! :D

Wow. Me gusta mucho tu historia.
La relación de hermanos entre Ethan y Jesse me encanta.
Ya quiero leer tu próximo capítulo

Shjsxjdossmdhsjzjdheidhebsndijedbdjwowowhsbzjkejeidhwb hi i dont have actual words for the emotions i have for this chapter but juss know i loved it (also yes the system i and so many people are in it for the money you get from it, that is one thing i dont miss from foster care)

CAS didn’t do a good job investigating Marlow . But then again, if the creep had put in half the effort at actually being a good parent instead of just a fraud pretending to be a parent.

I see Rebecca likes to play with her food. Rebecca’s chase of hapless Jesse, his thoughts, all realistic and suspenseful. And Rebecca’s change of heart, so to speak.

And you brilliantly show the Jesse decision to become a vampire. It occurred to me that as smart as Jesse is, he’s not only very dangerous - it was a massive waste for him to have to lose his human life. Wonder how he goes from being a vampire to protect Ethan to just being a plain evil vampire.

This chapter really shows how Jesse’s old affection for his little brother remained intact - even after he being evil and self-centred in every other way.

Great action, drams and writing! Well worth the three month wait!

1) I could see why the others are hesitant to forgive him.
2) It would have been fitting if the first person Jesse killed would be the abusive foster parent.
3) I don’t get Jesse’s plan. Doesn’t he know that if he hurts Sarah, Benny, Roy, or even Erica, Ethan will never forgive him?
4) Speaking of which, what the hell happened to Erica?
5) Are we going to see Rebecca anytime soon?

This chapter was brilliant yet heartbreaking. I haven't cried reading a chapter in ages. It takes a lot for me to cry, even if a fave character of mine is killed off it doesn't make sob.

Amanda had such a poor life first falling for a monster who abused her and Jesse treating them like dirt. Then getting a terminal illness when her life is probably at it's highest point. Jesse and Ethan were clearly her greatest treasures and gifts to make up for all the darkness in her life.

Omggg, I didn't believe that I'll cry soooo much while reading this. Rlly this chapter (more likely this story, well at least until now) is one of the most sensitive and emotional that I ever seen.

And I love this story annndd I can't wait to see the new chapter. :))

Very emotional, sentimental scene with their mothers’ death.

Loyal son and brother to bloodsucking murderer. Although he’s still loyal to his brother in the story. Watching his mother dying of cancer when he was a teen - helps to understand why Jesse wanted to become a vampire. He seemed to be mentally shattered at the funeral.

"her body wasn't strong enough to make her feel better" :((( oof, its sad bean hours :((

jesse was so strong for his mother and ethan, its drivin me crazyyyyy. such a happy family they were, with lil moments of heartbreak but big moments of laughter and joy! it made the sad part...well, even sadder :/

im really excited to see the rest of jesse and ethan's story unfold! hope it doesn't make me sob anymore than this chapter has :'((

i related to so much in this chapter that it hurts..

I related to Jesse and that want to help a financially struggling parent at such a young age, and wanting to be there for a younger sibling (which i didnt get as i was the youngest and last child my parents ever had).

I related to Ethan more or less in wants of mine...i always wanted an older sibling that was there for me ans could take care of me and loved me instead of just always hurting me...

I related to Amanda even...just the constant struggle of hiding things from the ones you love because you dont want them to hurt because of everything.

This chapter was so emotional for me to go through and i cried more than once.. thank you :)

I WANNA SMICKITY SMACCCCCC RICHARD BLACKKKKKK *gets pitchforks ready* WHAT A DINGUS

man this chapter was just tragedy after tragedy. with rebecca’s love burning in a church (side note: so sweet when sarah thought of ethan my heartttt :((( ) to jesse’s sad childhood — really hoping for a happier times in the next chapter fanfic buddy *looks stupid hopefully* :pp

i can’t wait for what’s next ! :D

Can make more of this story I like it

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ok i cant compose my thought aight so just...i relate Jesse...I relate to the parent that dips bc they didnt want to deal with another kid (cough cough my mom cough) bu bby :(((( yall imma cry for jess real fast bc i FELT that.

also i wanna implode at the cute bortherlyness of Jess nd Ethan like... bbys :((((((((

like...this chapter was amazing and i feel my heart doing somersaults like...:((

Jesse had a genuinely rotten childhood, with a drunken abusive father. Given Jesse's "devilish grin" at the end of the chapter, I hope patricide doesn't need to be added to his list of crimes.

I feel sorry for poor Amanda Black. Ironically, being left to raise her children alone might have been the best thing to happen to her. But it looks like her troubles were just beginning . . . .

Strange to say, Jesse seems to have taken after his father when it comes to his relationships with girls. Especially Sarah. He's in charge, and his girlfriend has to do what he wants, when he wants, and be where he wants (and be what he wants). No questions.

The idea for a chapter on the Cublie Animus sounds great. It's up to you if you want to add it as a bonus chapter or make a short story on its own.

Another brilliant chapter. I felt so sorry for Amanda Black, while yes some people could say, she could have walked out on that piece of scum to save her and Jesse from a lot of pain earlier on. Sometimes actions are harder than words. The sad truth is you can't help who you love and even toxic love can make you blind so to speak especially toxic love. The important thing was they eventually did get freedom from the drunk. I'm not surprised Jesse doesn't morn loss of Papa Black.

I am so looking forward to The Past of Two Brothers Part 2. I know it's going to be worth the wait. I loved how you explained R avoiding the fate of Reverend Black and his flock suffered.