Tapped out at Chapter 4 - even my self promise to finish stories I start couldn't make me complete this shit.

1. Your writing sucks - learn punctuation and basic spelling. Capitalize at the beginning of sentences and when writing Proper nouns such as names.

2. Your Gary-Stu is nothing like Naruto. He's an arrogant asshole who should honestly die.

3. Why the fuck would you suck off Itachi the clan slayer and then be such an absolute dick about Sasuke? Seriously, Itachi is nine short of a dozen and should have been drowned as a child.

4. This story could have been so much shorter - especially since your sex scenes are... pathetic. Seriously, either watch better porn or even better go out and have actual sex.

5. Please, please take a writing class. Your ability to craft a legible work is utterly subpar.

Have a nice day.

its either kisami or itachi

To the guest who hides behind guest and writes a long winded review about the state of this site. You do make some good points. However to shit on people's work only because it doesn't suit your high standard is pretty petty. Yes this story full of what you complained about but great writers can and may do the same. Instead of bring up constructive ideas, you shit on people and bash. You probably won't see this but I needed to say this.

I don't get it. Why do so many people who follow down every trope there is on fanfiction get a thousand reviews while others that write quality work get nothing? The grammar is bad, the clichés are overused, and the thing is people actually like this!

The second god-like, OP, Naruto, neglect, and Harems come into play, all the sexually repressed teenagers come out and praise work that is constantly overused instead of something well-written. This story in just 6 chapters has up to 70,000 words and a ton of reviews while another that's probably of the same length with an actual multitude of chapters has less, but actually keeps something on point and has better writing than most.

When will the age of wish fulfillment stop? It's such a hot topic to make Naruto a victimized Gary-Stu instead of a normal human being that has faults and can learn from them.

This is one of the reasons authors quit writing fanfiction because it all amounts to how much wish fulfillment there is in one story to another as if it is candy. But then again, I'm only guessing that there is going to be a 'challege' for your godlike character that surprisingly doesn't live up to their god-like power and strength.

When will the teenagers and adults grow up? When will people realize that there is better written work out there? But then again , how much do I want to bet that people in this comment section will go: iF yOu dOn'T lIkE iT, dOn't rEaD iT, hAtEr!

Maybe in psychological terms, people project so many of their wants and desires on a fictional character that they would want to put him on a victim on a god-like pedestal that handles their problems so fast that there is no character development, rather than make him a fleshed out character with flaws and fears that can't be overcome easily.

And so, everyone in this comment section to the writer themselves, what will you do when your brain starts growing and you start craving smarter content? Will you finally acknowledge the other writers on this site that actually write quality work and motivate them? Or will you just stay there silent because they write something your feeble brain can't comprehend? And doing so will make them feel unmotivated and won't see a reason for their story to stay on the site any longer since no one even wants to give them a simple review or feedback.

When all the good writers on this site are gone and all you have the same tropes being used over and over again, the tropes that cater to the will of the masses rather than the quality of work others put into theirs will become boring one day.

When their Heart and Soul are put into something, don't you all think it hurts when someone just hears crickets? Of course, this is probably coming from an immature audience, how silly of me.

Fox ears and 9 tails? Strike 1
Hamura had the byakugan, not Hagoromo. Boruto doesn't count because Kishimoto isn't writing it. Kodachi and Ikemoto ruined the lore and your taking source material from that hot garbage. Strike 2 and 3 and you're OUT AH HERE! Trolololololol

Fox ears and tail of different colors: Strike #1
The Sharingan is not an evolution of the byakugon

This was interesting but I can't help wondering about Naruto's lifespan. I would like to read more of this and see what happens in their futures.

Make the sequel chapter numbers longer, all I got for the sequel is have Hagoromo and Hamura teleport them all to a different universe where Naruto is still the nidaime Kyuubi with Sasuke’s Rinnegan and have the six path chakra and his mates still having the abilities Naruto have to them, and he has a brother name Menma Uzumaki who has the yang Kyuubi inside him and have Naruto train Menma controlling Kurama. Naruto is still ghost but make him a kitsune-sennin, make Tsunade the slug sage (if that’s even a thing), make Hinata have the Byakugan and Jougan basically making her a queen on the Otsutsuki clan, have Naruto and his mates leave Konoha, basically make Naruto like Sasuke excluding Sasuke’s pride, make Sasuke like Naruto and…that’s all I got.

Very nicely done

Loved this. Well done. Tip for the future though. Make the chapters a little shorter. Spread it out over more chapters. I often find myself skipping dialogue when chapters are this long

This was not a bad story. A little revision with spelling and track record of characters speaking at a given moment but not bad.

Shit fic.

Just rereading this since you'd noted some edits, and had to comment on something I didn't first time through.

I laughed at the konoha assholes when they said they needed long term stability now, then decided to appoint the oldest, most crippled fucker in the village as next hokage. Danzo is so old he might die at any time, how is that long term stability?

I just found that funny.

was a good read and enjoyed the changers you made i ended up spitting out my strongbow from laughing at the konan being a freak but good work

Well, lets hope you actually made an effort to make less mistakes and make it more readable.
As of chapter 3 - where I stopped reading - I don't think there was a paragraph that didn't have a few mistakes in it. Mostly you not deciding if you want names to start with a capital letter or not or making it hard to read a conversation by having it all in one bloody paragraph (why do people do that?).