I really like the tornament idea PLUS you write really good, I'm excited for the next chapter.

Hey I like the story! Keep up the good work! :)

Glad your back. The writing is a little rough but I think the story is good

Please dpnt abandoned this masterpiece! I hope you are safe and will update this sooner!

Oh wait you are make Chapter 4 Then wish luck in that and wish you luch again when you reach chapter 5. Good Luck

Your Story is Awesome im Still reading Chapter 1 But still Chapter 1 is Fun for me to read wish you luck to make Chapter 5

I'm sorry, but Ainz giving Shalltear a date while only giving Albedo clothes is beyond 'dense' and very much cruel imo. Worse is he's also going on a date with Aura and Mare(?), who even in canon, he thinks of as children. Which, if you really think about it, since he does say all NPCs are children, the twins can't get any more children-like than that. That's enough to raise some red flags and makes Ainz/Satoru creepy. Do you have a bone to pick with Albedo or something? ;
It already kind of turned me off of Ainz and the OOCs of the other main characters - at least you haven't introduced an OC that is more OP than Ainz which authors seem to be fond of that just ruins an Overlord fanfic imo. Anyway, I don't think I can continue reading the fic what with all my sentiments but still, good luck with the endeavor.

Chapters are too short

Just what Albedo needs a new dress and being excluded

(jk)

This is the first fan fiction I have written in my entire life I hope you guys enjoyed reading it as much I enjoyed writing it.

Why do you wish us pain?

Interesting. But chapters could be little longer.

poor evil eye and albedo D: well i enjoyed this chapter so thank you looki g forward too more

Very good and please keep writing

Wait . Am I dumb or did I post twice ? I don't see my comments tho . Sorry if I did indeed comment twice .