this has been grand so far

can you not put your long ass readers response in the story? it honestly very infuriating and you basically straight up faking your story word count at this point.

Thanks for the chapter!

Well dam. Let’s see what happens

It is always a pleasure to read your story and always leaving with a cliffhanger. I wonder what happens next.

And that's how I got a cliffanger on my knee

no seriously where is the rest can not be finished like this ...

because it's finished so now I want the next one

Seriously it was a beautiful episode but I'm curious to know if Ochako will soon the knowledge of big bro Shiragaki and above all how it will take the whole story I point 10 imaginary dollars that in case they meet Shiragaki will talk about the murder done by Izuku

or probably Toga will

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Review time!

I really loved this story. Let me say that there's been a constant and clear improvement from the first chapter up unti this point.

Grammar, ortography, punctuation, lines and paragraphs and their structures at the first chapters are all pretty bad, don't get me wrong you improved. A lot.

Really, the difference in quality between the first chapters to the latter is like going from water to wine. And I'm not exxagerating.

I'm glad I decided to look past the errors of the start of the story in the hopes that later on the story would get better and compensate me for my determination. It did and I wasn't let down in the slightlest.

(Perhaps it would be worth a rewrite of only these few first chapters later on?)

On characters' and their backstories, depth, characterization and self development. This is perhaps one of the areas in which you excel at. Izuku and AfO take the cake. The rest of the cast is very finely written too.

The plot, the way it moves forward and its speed are all spot on.

Descriptions overall could use some polishment too.

The dialogues, the fight scenes and how you have Izuku train and develop his abilities are all awesome, I don't think anyone else could have imagined a better way to write all those.

I anxiously wait to read more soon.
I hope I helped with constructive criticism. Over and out.

PS: Post your story on AO3 too, you'll see a huge boom on them. The feedback there, especially on this fandom, is immense and with greater quality than this site.
PPS: Soon you're going to be amongst the big leagues of MHA, Apotheosis, Cursed Blood, Force for Good... The pressure upon you is going to raise even more, are you up to the challenge?! I certainly hope so, whenever you need ideas or just someone to take a look over the chapter before you post it, you can count on me.

Aaaaaaand im out. Izuku is always spineless. Somehow this version of him is even worse than canon. The story is well written, the grammar is good and all that jazz. But i'm not reading any longer i just really don't like how he is in this one.

This story was pretty good up until Izuku rejected All Might's offer. Not because I'm so desperate to see him have One for All but because Izuku is just going in circles. Honestly he just seems selfish. I understand his issues with the morality of using All for One but he got the quirks from the Nomu which he made some headway with but then he just never goes back to them after the issue with Bakugo's "attack". And then he is given an opportunity to have a powerful quirk given to to him freely and he rejects it because of his fucking issues. I thought after the festival he had come to the mindset of using everything in his power to be a hero and to not squander his potential but he first time he gets a completely moral opportunity for a quirk he bitches. Izuku is honestly pathetic at this point and he is making no progress. Congratulations you figured out how to stop quirks at a distance, WHOOPS SORRY, can't use it cause people might see. He is honestly worse than Shoto before the festival.

Homophobic?

It should either be racist or roid rage looking ass

One slap woman

But all jokes aside, the relationship is progressing... Quite naturally? I'm not very experienced with romance. But I was surprised that none of the two cranked up the heat to the max in the scene where they are in the same room.

I'm also not sure about why exactly is that Tomura scene in the middle of the episode, unless it's setting up something with Toga? Again, it wasn't ver clear.

The rest was good, keep it up

WELCOME BA wait people comment about their pe*censored*? *visible confusion* A-anyway welcome back , hopefully no more hiatus, or at least don't make it in life changing moment like this time , you left us with Ochako staring at AFO trying to make an origami.
I like tomura's character here, at least better than bakugo's.
Great chapter, keep up the good work.

this is an awesome story, I hope you keep up the good work,

Please no erixkota their to young for this shit

HOT DAMN ZERO TO ONE HUNDRED IN AN INSTANT!

FUCK YEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSS! Daddy All for One and Momma Inko and official! You did such a great job with All for One that I can’t help, but want him to be happy. Yes I know he’s still an active villain, but damnit you make him feel so human! You give him hope for something better and that makes ME want something better for him. I know that he’s going to end up in Tartarus prison after the big fight, and I know he’s going to cause untold amounts of destruction, but is it wrong for me to hope he’ll change?!

I absolutely LOVE that Eri looks up to Izuku so much.

Ok the whole “we can hear them” thing was perfectly timed.

I’m not sure if they just couldn’t sleep while next to the other or if they actually did the dirty. Ah ok no horizontal dancing.

That phone call was absolutely hilarious. Though something did pop into my head. So Inko and All for One are clearly in a relationship. If they got married wouldn’t that technically make Shigaraki Izuku older brother? Also, what would Kurogiri be? The family pet?

Does Shigaraki have a thing for Toga?!

LMFAO Kurogiri said fuck that, I’m out bitchs!

HA! Suck it Bakugou! Go Ochaco!

I’ll be honest I wasn’t sure if you’d keep the matches the same. I’m worried about what will happen when Izuku and All Might clash. We’ve already seen what happens when All Might tried to touch Izuku.