So good! I absolutely love Narnian version of Biblical stories or ideas, as you've done here, and as WillowDryad, OldFashionedGirl95, Follower of Aslan, and probably others have done elsewhere. Lewis, I think, would be pleased!

Thanks for writing!

VDMA,
Sophia the Scribe

Absolutely beautiful and poignant. I loved every word and every line. You are so, so talented. May the Lord bless you with more words and inspiration, that you may bless the world with more magnificent stories to read.

Your writing is so wonderful and really captures the true account in ways that take me deeper in my own reading of scripture. I applaud your boldness of faith in your writing. Thanks, it gives me something to strive for. Excellent job!

Oh, you read WillowDryad too! I've read all of hers and Lady Alambiel's stories too. (Go read Lady A's, bottom up. They're AWESOME. Also, she and WD have collaberated in the past.) Very nice and very subtle nod. I didn't catch it until it was pointed out. The Bible story I did. Keep writing! I really liked this!

Oh, I love this. Your description of Edmund's letters to Lucy is delightful. I was smiling so big, especially about the unhappy Bees and the Tadpoles. :D

And "pinklings"! Oh, I love that. Love. I may have to borrow that from you! All of this is so much fun!

Aaaaand then it's not. O.o

This is gorgeously written. So beautifully told. I knew what would happen, but not how, and the how is marvelous. God has given you a gift. Bless you for sharing it.