They believed him cause he probably maxed out speechcraft

Lol, vanir scene the best

Interesting

Hmmm

This sucks cuz your mc is a weak willed b*tch lol

I only have one complaint about this story so far your chapters are far too short, besides that, it is beautifully described and wonderfully eloquent and I cannot wait to read your next chapter keep up the great work

Good update, I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.

Thanks for the chapter!

Still reading and enjoying it greatly.

wonderful story so far I impatiently await your next chapter

Why is he spilling his guts to everyone every chapter? Why is he letting them capture him and boss him around so much especially after saving them? It makes no sense when you remember hes the dragon born, the second he didnt beat the shit out of eragon for capturing him the first time and the second he didn't leave for how ungrateful they were the second time broke my suspension of disbelief.

Still reading, still enjoying and glad you're still releasing. Thanks for the chapter and good luck on your school work! (always disliked math myself, though science things were fun!)

120 word chapter, combined with the how I just find some of the stuff unrealistic, I'll stop here.

But kudos to you for sticking with it, you never improve if you don't write, you should probably reread your chapters, and combine chapters that are as short as this one.

I have high hopes for this story.

comparing this chapter to the first, there is definite improvement. The main issue that I have is that the character interactions seem very forced and rushed. It doesn't feel like anyone sticks to their arguments in any of the conversations. For example, Nasuada has a problem with Levos, Levos gets angry and explains something, Nasuada apologizes, Levos apologizes and nothing has changed between the two characters. I can tell what you are going for with some of the interactions. I liked how the fact that he was a vampire was brushed off by Arya because she didn't believe him until he came stumbling in with irrifutable proof, the flow felt natural and believe able

This is a personal opinion so take it with a grain of salt. I feel like Levos could do with some more fleshing out of his character. a few things that have been touched on that could an perhaps should hold more significance but seemingly dont. The fact that he has a wife and two kids (I assume that is what aela and the others are) there's a lot that could be going on there and from the looks of things you are setting up something to do with them. The fact that he used to be a soldier, not just any soldier but a rebel soldier, there's a lot you can do with that.

You have definitely improved, keep up the good work. Remember, what i say doesn't mean diddly squat if you are not enjoying your writing. Your thoughts and opinions come first, not mine or any other reader.