like always Naruto becomes a servant... i have no problem with him having Issesi's harem, however i'm so tired of reading stories where you join the peerage, when you can still help them, and follow story line, even without joining the peerage. its rly hard to find a story where lead don't join her peerage (Sad face) (just can't read stories where mc join her harem anymore) gl with the story m8.

Your english could use some work.

Im just curious but why is it they you haven't bothered to get better at your grammar at all

This is goood

I get you want to write your story how you want to write it. Can you at least write proper sentences. You had so many words missing or out of place that it made it hard to understand what was being read.

You might want to proof read. Your missing caps, fragmented sentences, grammar errors

Hmm, I wonder why Kaguya was crying for Naruto anyways keep up the great work!

Merci pour le chapitre

Dude I hope you put rias back in the harem Issei deserves NOTHING HE'S TRASH WORST THAN RISER! Also when will there be ecchi parts I do hope after his coils are fixed I mean he's a one man orgy with shadow clones.

Erza scarlet, Diane form seven sins, Alexis Rhodes yugioh go sacred gear basically able to summon duel monsters, akiza from 5d's, Rio from zexal, fem jaden gx, fem Ichigo kurosaki fem bell cranell with a sacred gear or powers based on his skill and with a love for naruto saving her or something like that she grows more powerful. That be cool! I don't know how to do fanfic but I have a great imagination(/)

Man it makes me sad that you still have rias picking that piece of trash over naruto. Also why didn't you have Asia use twilight healing to fix his coils or koneko use bedroom arts I mean it healed the trash after he went all juggernaut mode .

Please use a website called Grammarly (website spell checker) and use proper vocab from Highschool DxD and Naruto. For example: Issei's sacred gear is "A" Longinus type, only thirteen exists. It is NOT "THE" Longinus. It's like the Devil Fruit's from One Piece. Multiple different fruits with different categories.

the spelling and grammar is horrible

I will launch a petition so that the authors stop distorting Naruto and make him an oc / self-insert by giving him "cool" powers! return your chakra to Naruto, shit!

I drop this piece of garbage here! it's so unbelievable! how can Raynare believe that she will become an angel again?

ONLY GOD at this power, you are just looking for a false pretext to save Raynare confess!

Basically, we have a Naruto oc with coll powers but which has nothing to do with the real Naruto?
why strip Naruto of what makes Naruto precisely?

and Naruto who joined the Orc? only to poach Issei's harem? why are the authors so highly unimaginative and like to repeat the same overused tropes?