just a minor note, but I'd recommend either getting a beta, or something like grammarly. your grammar isn't bad, per say, but you often make minor mistakes that would be simple to correct

Hope your doing well Kyu

I found the plot twist of the Main Character being a Zorua to be my FAVORITE part so far.

I haven’t read until the end or anything, just up to this chapter, but I honestly think this twist had enough quirky hints and ideas leading up to it to be really effective and fun. I’m having a great time just thinking of the implications!

No, I have no problem with the Zorua reveal, MY problem is with the constant referral to himself AS the author.

For me, it just removes any sense of immersion when I’m told that what I’m reading IS a fanfic. I’m fine with meta-references to the fact the character in the story wrote fanfic in his previous life (IE your current one), but taking it as a given that your life is a piece of fiction and will follow the plot twists that you yourself would insert removes a lot of tension.

I’m happy that you’ve been able to build it back up with this twist, and have been able to write a compelling story thus far despite your SI expecting the general story beats.

HOWEVER, it continually irks me that your character KNOWS he’s in a fic, with absolutely no doubts about it. I mean, there is SO MANY OTHER POSSIBILITIES. What if God wanted to screw with you for writing them, and launched you into a fandom you’re familiar with. What if, considering Dimension Warping Beings exist now, you were just in the wrong time and place, and got launched over? What if this was all a result of temporal BS and your Quantum Wavelength (or some shit) hit an unexpected variable? What if you were in a Coma, and everything that happened was a dream? It would be impossible to tell.

I get that “Damn it, me” is the title, and as such is somewhat based on the gag that you and your IRL self are in a constant state of self-hatred or harm or however you would explain it.

And, like I said before, I AM enjoying this fic. There are some parts I find clever, and others that I would like to see expanded upon. I’m still reading it because I understand that my one biggest complaint is ingrained in the story, and I think the rest of it will be worth it.

I just wanted to point out the blind-spot *I’m* experiencing, so that you can correct it (or at least be aware of it) in the future.

... I mean, or not? I’m unsure how often you look at comments, or how much advice or criticism from them you take. Just take this as you will.

Thanks for the fic.

I think I realized what it is that seems off about this fic. If the protagonist doesn't seem to care about anything, then why should we as the reader? It's an interesting fic, but just kinda bland. The protagonist is just coasting through life, shit happens around him, and the public romanticizes it. It's almost more interesting to hear about the publics reactions then it is to actually be apart of this journey. I just hope the mc finds some kind of joy or challenge in his journey. Keep up the good work

Kyu x Mismagius OTP

lol I could totally see Karen kidnapping Kyu

BARBECUE it was the right thing to do? What?

BARBECUE it was the right thing to do? What?

Hi, yes, ruthless serial killer in the making here, how can I help?

Just something I noticed:
Having all your paragraph be the same or similar length make the chapter look boring to read and will turn away some people even if they don't realize it. It doesn't help that when I'm reading and something interrupt me, I have to skim over one or two paragraphs to find where I left off. It doesn't happen all the time but it happens enough that it can get annoying.

If you check the most popular stories on this site, you'll notice that most of them have paragraphs lengths that are all over the place.

This character remember my young self in many things

This fourth wall break is really a putt off

get well man. really enjoying the story. I believe I been following since you had released chapter 11

This chapter was good, really enjoyed how emotional your mc was about his teams pain. The precious 10 chapters or so we're a literal drag to read through though. Please give your mc a tougher time in the future, seeing him just steamroll everyone and everything that comes his way is exciting at first, but it gets hella predictable after a while. Keep up the good work!

Thanks for the chapter! And i hope you get better soon.