I'm not gonna read this but I have to comment on the absurdity of the summary "Small Harem" and then going off to say its NINE people. That's fucking ridiculous.

add momo and maybe melissa

well since you gave me the option harem of 9 please cause he is the 9th user of ofa id ask for more but that the highest you have the option for
so far we got mei mina and jirou soon can we get momo maybe ochako tsuyu a couple from 1b like itsuka or setuna or some of the others also maybe nejire be super cool
if it was a bigger harem id ask for all of class1a a d 1b and pro heroines and more lols but this isn't mega smutt harem

also while a pretty alright chapter major bummer at cutting the lemon the very first one come on man go back and re-add it

also I'm fine with calling iida vacuum its funny can izuku be class president

I’m out, gay ships

Unfortunately this needs some work, as with the way it is currently written, the story is very hard to read and become interested in.

1. The bolding of their speech is very distracting.
2. You should start learning to separate out your paragraphs properly. Anytime someone new starts speaking for example. It helps keep the relevant information together and stops confusion from who all is talking.
3. I would recommend working on your punctuation, grammar, and word choice. For punctuation especially, there are many places where there should be commas and such to help break up the sentences properly. An example for these could be the sentence: "Izuku was called into the next room by the nurse he looked back at his parents." Instead, it should read something more along the lines of: "When Izuku was called into the exam room, he looked back at his parents for approval."
Another would be: "Izuku did you hear that you can become a hero." It should read something more along the lines of: "Izuku, did you hear that? You can become a hero!" Although, I would personally swap the location of the name in the first part, so it read as: "Did you hear that, Izuku?" Both are correct, however I feel putting the persons name at the end is more common in everyday English speech.
4. It is ridiculously rushed. With the way this chapter was written, it seems more like you made a rough draft of some basic concepts for the chapter, and then threw some dialogue into it without actually fleshing out the concepts. While you don't need to have an incredibly wordy and drawn out style, the way it is now comes across as: thing, next thing, next thing, dialogue, next thing, next thing, dialogue, dialogue, dialogue, next thing. There is very little that expands, explains, or comments on the separate things, which makes it feel as if none of what is happening is important, since so little was written about it.

I unfortunately cannot say anything on the actual concept for your story, as I was personally barely able to force myself to finish this chapter. That being said, I hope you continue to work on your writing and wish you luck with your future chapters for this story, and any other story you may start in the future.

My childhood has been broken into tiny painful glass shards, help me plz.

It's James, or Fred and I finally found this fanfic. Sorry I haven't been to CCD lately

i like the fic the interactions between izuku and bakugo are hilarius the lemon needs more content i recomend read it for other fics for references this is the only thing that i dont like about the fic and for the two remains girl (if it is gonna be a 5 girls harem) please be momo and melissa
sorry for any mistakes english is not mi first language

ok now i get it is a op izuku FIC .
can you plz seperate more the lines of dialog it gets a bit of a mess , if you do it reads a allow better for some people

I don't like it when you write those sentences in bold letters.
(Can't remember a better word/words for it at the moment, English is not my first language)