I liked how Sakura was to embarrassed/ashamed to tell Naruto about her past that she used Shin as a way to tell them both about her life while trying to cheer Shin up which seemed to work and give him a goal to strive toward

For a minute i forgot Naruto can't talk when he was trying to ask if Shin needed Sakura to heal him got a good laugh out of him describing her

I do wonder is Sakura did meet her Grandmother as is was mentioned that they did know where her house was so maybe? either way was nice to see Naruto get a bit of his fire back

Weird how much i love this story and the unique concept it provided why not leaning heavy into canon events and building on the main plot devices oh and Kakashi is a good teacher here

You’ve built some really solid characters bars. You also wrote in a way that makes the reader want to learn about them. I never thought I would find a Sakura samurai mom backstory so compelling. The little boy was a great option to develop Naruto’s character. I’m interested to see how much of his joy he can recover. Do you plan on deviating from the canon quite a bit? I can see it going there for sure. Your fic has the potential to do it well.

Oh god. I’m emotional. I’m cryyyyyying. Life needs to be protected and Naruto deserves all the hugs and Sasuke is opening up a bit more which is super good, and Sakura continuously fights for herself and that’s amazing!

This is quite different from what I'm used to, but in a really good way. I find it interesting to explore these characters and see what happens when their darkest side takes the wheel. I feel like Sasuke and Kakashi's interpretations are absolutely perfect and tbh, they don't even need more of a tragic backstory to be like they are here, it's believable enough. For Sakura and Naruto, yes, it was necessary to give them non-canon stuff (Iruka's death, the assault, Sakura being deaf) in order to make it work, but I do like it.

I absolutely love your description. Marvelous. I could really understand where Naruto is coming from and while this is so opposite of Naruto in the manga and anime who shouts and is loud, this Naruto you portrayed feels authentic given the circumstances and the age. I applaud you for that. It’s an interesting start and I really liked this first chapter! I’m excited to read the next and to read more from you in general! Great job so far!

I would not say anything in the story is rushed as i have seen this story more about how Team 7 deals with their disability than closely following cannon...of course who needs to write the 6839683 version of the Wave mission and change one thing or keep anything the same for Naruto who at times lacks motivation so how does he meet Haku so i love the story how it is

Seeing as this is mostly through the thoughts of Naruto always makes me wonder if things with Team 7 are as bad as he things or if he is over thinking as i would like to think that this Team 7 really cares for and is worried about him but have issues showing it because of their own issues

Like how Sakura cleaned up the place almost as if she had done it before while waiting on his bed for him to come out or how she has dropped the kun from Sasuke and continues to remind Naruto to 'think about us' which could mean they have been dating but Naruto is lost in depression he forget or thinks he does not deserve it or (most likely) the team is a close Family trying to care for each other because no one else is willing to help them out

Not getting up...as lot of people have that problem some more than others so that part felt a bit too real :(

Although it has moved fairly quick, I will say that it hasn’t felt rushed. We are getting the bird’s eye view of the developing relationship of the team and it’s actually working here in my opinion. I expect it to slow down as the story progresses of course but for these first four chapters, it worked. The way Naruto feels seems very realistic. I’m assuming you are writing from personal or a shared experience. It’s a good story premise. Looking forward to more.

if sakura and naruto (NaruSaku) doesn't happen, i'm sueing everyone i swear. not even naruto's talk-no-jutsu would make me back out from this.

wow! interesting story

I seem to have finally pulled out my concrit commentary hat, so I'll offer some thoughts since you requested them.

Time is more compressed in this story, and I feel that it costs these chapters scene immediacy. On the plus side, narrative ground is covered more quickly, since this feels like a set-up for a longer story. The story starts at the beginning, which runs the risk of boring the reader by virtue of being a familiar start point, but we have significant changes that alter the angle of the canon events. The downside to compression, however, is that the significant changes in these introductory chapters are personality rather than plot differences, I would like to argue, so the narrative impact on the reader is emotional rather than by plot. If the reader doesn't have the necessary time to invest in the character's differences and sufferings, there won't be the full effect of the results and consequences of them, both upon the reader and on the characters for their own developments and relationships. The reader still feels the emotional impacts of the events on the characters, but I'm concerned that the faster pace isn't allowing the fullest potential impact that could be reached. What I'm trying to say is, I'm not sure if it's necessary to pile more sorrows on Naruto (I'm also considering the assault being too much), since they're very evident; but the reader might experience them more fully at a slower pace. Of course, there's always the risk of being too slow depending on the direction you take this story and/or the necessities of the scene itself, and pace balancing is always finicky. Changing the pace midway can throw the reader off, too, but time and pacing came to mind when you asked for thoughts, so I wanted to share them.

Hiruzen frustrates me, but I also can't quite get a handle on him. He's not all-powerful, evidenced clearly with how Naruto's grown up, so having him imply to Naruto that he knows everything just frustrates me for Naruto's sake. Naruto received his headband as a kind of band-aid, yet the cover up somehow fits Hiruzen's persona here...? I miss Iruka. It's amazing how much the dynamics and story can change with one character missing as much as having an extra character. (It was probably stated, but I think I missed it. What happened with Iruka that he died?)

I think that the changes make for a really interesting Team Seven dynamic. I think Sasuke always had PTSD, so it's interesting to have it acknowledged. Naruto seems like a more realistic take, as are the changes with Ino. I'm hoping that Naruto not calling out the names of the techniques will give him an edge, as well as Sakura's new sensory abilities that compensate for her deafness. Not to mention that Naruto managed to beat Sasuke, so Sasuke came to tell Naruto to get on the team. That was unexpected. And Sakura's not a fangirl, even if she has a crush; that's a plus from me. So, yeah, I'm really intrigued how this new Team 7 will work, particularly for if Kakashi has any differences that he hasn't shown yet.

I'm also interested in this new take on the massacre. I hope Itachi's presence in the village makes Sasuke less likely to try to leave for power. How has Itachi changed? Will we get to see him at any point?

Anyway, I hope that you're staying safe right now. This has an intriguing start, and I'm interested to read where it goes. Till next time~

This story is amazing! Please update whenever you can!

Es una temática interesante,creo que sus dificultades les harán más fuertes o decididos ,se van a esforzar más w y pueden ser un gran equipo de sigilo y pelea :D

So much to like about this story. The loss of Iruka a year before he graduated was rather sad but the relationship that started between him and Sakura i thought was great along with making me smile a few times when Sakura stopped to really think about who Naruto really was. While yea you could of spent 4-5 chapters building up the friendship during their time at the academy but i felt what you wrote was just fine

Having Shino sitting by him i felt was a nice touch as most people would not bother him as people seems to be creeped out by him because of the bugs (I don't blame them) but Shino is a good guy and when someone else sat next to him i expected Shikamaru but having Sakura trying to pay forward the friendship she got from Ino was nice

The last bit of the chapter got me to laugh a bit at Naruto's introduction :D

first! great chapter!
second, I totally agree with your thought on ino. I literally never thought about that until now and it's like"duh?" so thank you for that insight!

ohhhhh this was such a good intro chapter! I'm so excited to see what comes!