Too much OP

Naruto has too many skills right now, there's no room character development

I think a little editing and tweaking can help improve it

Maybe have naruto's stats and skills listed at the end of the chapters and not count towards the word count for the stories? They take up a lot of space in your self prescribe 5k words and don't really contribute much to the story. Only focus on the new stuff, not retelling everything if you do mention it in the story.

Also you need to work on including dialogue, assuming people know what's going on from your descriptions will hinder your writing and character development. You don't need to go overboard on dialogue but it should be so absent.

1. You need to work on not jumping keeping the same time-tense. Arrived is past, but saying would is present tense. You used both in his confrontation with the kumo min
2. Did I miss where "the world" thing came from? Seems random and way too OP
3. Longer chapters please. I bookmarked this story in my hiatus folder since it took forever to update and then got through these 2 updates in less than an hour. If you're gonna do short chapters then update more frequently please.

Cool this Will continue ? Brosky

Thanks for the chapter! Some constructive critism though, I would research past and future tenses, as you switch quite a bit and spend most of the chapter in future tense, which makes for some strange reading. I like the new powers though and I'm excited for the next chapter!

please update immediately

interesting story. i can't wait for more chapters.

You pulled way too many skills from so many verses,
I could see this one will become bloated pile of garbage of story.
I am out and have a good day

okey so here it goes...

you have already buried your self .. now you cant make any excuses if naruto fails at anything.. he has to much power and he have enough to fix his intelligence and mind now you have to make him win in everything and he must be best at what he does cause you cant expect someone to suck when he have all those abilities if he does your mc will be hated cause then the only reason to why he fails is because he is an retarded idiot who should have been tortured to death slowly easy right ? )

alright second

to many different powers is never good why not just make him "the one above all" ? i mean the reason why people like these kind of novels is cause you see their growth you just went from level 1 to level 1000 with all those powers dosent Mather if he is level 4 if he got those powers you take away all the thing that makes a story well a story ? so you fucked yourself with that

now third
your writing style is ugly ? dont know how to better explain it .. it all looks like you just mesh everything you can think of together with no thought about it whatsoever

4th

we dont really give a shit if you have 1000 harem members just make their stories interesting or good... meeting someone then they start fucking each other might work with like 2 people or something but if you do that more people will just nail you to the cross so yeah ...

5th
this story is already doomed from the start because you did all those mistake above have a nice day ! ja ne !

Why not absorb the Lantern ring also and just use his body as a focus instead of the ring? both the Lantern and ring were forged from the Starheart, so if he can absorb the Lantern, he should be able to do the same for the ring.

i like the story. but i really dont like your pov, its a really weird 3 person view. (my english sucks, i know :/)

No more ability / character status spam.

It would’ve been nice to know Hinata was inevitably included in this from the start as well.

Too much telling and not enough showing.

Nice

I wonder if the terrigen gas would be useful? I mean it would awaken mutations right? Maybe he will awaken mokuton, or chakra chain or something else. Lol.