Dude, I realize these are first stories and all, but someone NEEDS to tell you this. None of your “stories” make any sense. Here’s why. I’m not flaming, I’m just your first critic.

There’s no detail, plot, or structure. You’re just throwing things in because you think they’re good, but doing that is not how you write a story. You need to explain to the readers what’s going on and add in the important stuff that makes up a story that you have yet to add.

Bottom line, nobody will read this. Now, either you’re illiterate or English isn’t your first language. Either way, you show tell that to people before you get nothing but flames. If it’s not either of those things, then I don’t know what to say other than delete them and get off and write again when you get better.

Of course, you could be trying to pull off a new original story, but if you are doing that, piece of advice. Don’t use existing franchises. If you can’t make them work and not even explain how you think they fit together, that ruins the entire story.