Hi,

I finished what you have written of this story last night, and I woke up this morning knowing I had to write you a review before I do anything else!

A really good story is something you never forget. And I won't be forgetting this one, whether you finish it or not. From the beginning to chapter 12, it was completely engrossing. The action parts (and there was so much action, thank you!) were edge of your seat thrilling, and the quiet parts were emotionally affecting. It was satisfyingly humorous and everything was believable.

I loved your character, Zethu. It's not often that I can say this, but this OC was so interesting, I wanted nothing more than to get to know her, and you started revealing her past and her character so skillfully. I honestly preferred reading from her POV, because I found her very relatable. I think another mark of really good storytelling, is that you begin to identify with the character so much, that you begin empathizing with them without realizing it. This happened to me, and I found myself almost crying as you were telling parts of her backstory. I also love how you revealed her force sensitivity near the end, it totally explained a lot of her behavior and made her that much more interesting.

I also think you did a fantastic job beginning the partnership-friendship with her and Din. I think it would have happened exactly like it did here, and the events they went through toughener would have produced a quick, strong bond like this. I LOVED that he gave her his knife, made perfect sense. She earned his respect during that fight.

There's probably more I could say, I am just so impressed and affected by this! Call me a nerd but I am a total sucker for a really well told story. I hope you continue this, but whatever you are doing, I hope you are doing well and are blessed.

This is so good! You write action very well. I was on the edge of my seat the whole chapter!

Update soon loved it.

Liked it

Thank you for the update. Stay safe and healthy as well!

I'm loving your story! You write so well. Can't wait for more!

:))

Still loves the chapter even though there was no Din!

Excited for the next chapter!

You’re doing great. I think her sudden turn around of character was a little quick but considering the pacing of the story and what we possible have ahead of us I’m glad you’ve pushed the story and relationship forward. Good job.

Good story so far

Looking good

liking it.

Oooo, yea please don’t make us wait to long for more!

Omg I just binged your story! Love it! Can’t wait for more!