Good story

Thanks

Good read

...Lol so harry is this strong and a fucking mage/sorcerer for no fucking reason then? He just dies so easy... What was the point of him even learning ANY magic?

Any chapter from you is better than no chapter so thank you. Anyway, I’ve enjoyed all 7 chapters thus far, not that you need to know that. I hope you’re feeling better. May the depression end and make every day after brighter than previously. Good luck ️️️

(A ship named Hedwig and an AI named Luna — )

Always a joy to see Dormammu fanboys/fangirls get a scolding. Even Dormammu got a slight scolding — nice.

Glared at by 49 phoenixes and 2 dragons — there there, Harry, you tried. *snicker*

Really liking Harry’s cautious, collecting-items-knowledge nature. Yes, get some of everything, Harry.

Oh my! What beautiful sass leveled at Odin. You have made my night

I love immortals, like Nundus, love the Hallows, like dimension travel and time travel. What’s not to love about this Herald fic? ️️️
Love the island sanctuary, by the way. Not sure why more people don’t do it in either of these fandoms.

very nice keep up the good work:)

i personally like the idea of the Egyptian Khopesh for the Godkiller. hear me out. a Khopesh is also known as a "Sickle Sword" Sickle bing another term for a Scythe. and even looking at the thing, a khopesh looks like a straightened scythe.

now, that is admittedly only my opinion...and it is pretty heavily influenced by the fact i have been playing Assassin's Creed Origins the last few days. i have a pretty badass legendary Khopesh that i keep upgrading every few levels as my main weapon. so i am fairly biased towards that sword type at the moment.

There was some weirdness with tenses in this chapter. There's a part that says "Bor softly glared at me."

That would work if this story were written in the first person, but it is not. So it probably should be "Bor glared at Harry" or just "Bor glared at him" or "Bor glared."

"softly glaring" is just sort of weird and sounds vaguely feminine. Like, I can imagine a girl being coy and slightly annoyed "softly glaring" at someone she's attracted to. Or something like that. Some big, hairy, hulking ghost "softly glaring" at Harry just sounds strange.

Also, there's one point where you break into the second person which was also very strange and kind of out of the blue. Personally, I don't think there should ever be second person inside of a third person narrative. And the little aside that ultimately was just you (the writer) justifying something to the reader was pretty unnecessary.

Maybe that bit was meant to be parenthetical, but there were no parenthesis to denote that.

Also, in one of the previous chapters, there was another random spot of first person as well. At the time, I assumed it was meant to be italicized or you forgot some punctuation. You know, something to mark it as internal monologue.

There's also some repeated errors that I think are a little unusual and you may not have noticed them. In a few places, you mean to use the word "of", but instead use "if". There's also the very weirdly common error I see all the time in fan fiction: People writing "weary" when they really mean "wary".

Weary is tired. Wary is cautious. Yet I see it confused all the time, and pretty much only ever in fan fiction.

As for the pairing, I like the idea of Amora being one of Harry's long-term romantic interests. Maybe a wife, alongside the Valkyrie mentioned. Definitely not because she's a strong witch and you mentioned she had big tits. Not at all.

As for the Herald weapon, I don't really have any idea what would be best because I would have chosen a sword. But Harry already has two. And an axe. A kusari-gama is a little too weeb in my opinon, to be the god-killing weapon of a British wizard. I also always felt that the kusari-gama was more of a utility weapon or something to use when you needed to create space between you and an enemy. A god-killing weapon, imo, should be something you use to get up close and personal. It's a murder tool. One that should be bad ass and visceral.

So, maybe a bigger fuck off sword? Like, Harry has some one-hand or hand-and-half swords, but he doesn't have a larger "greatsword" type thing as part of his official arsenal.

You could always go range with it too if you want something more esoteric and less "metal". A magical bow that conjures and fires its own anti-god arrows would be neat, except for the whole... You can fire as many arrows as you like and with the intended nature of the weapon that would make Harry a biiiit unstoppable. Melee would force Harry to fight with skill and speed, a magical ranged weapon would be like Harry sniping fish in a barrel with a laser-guided nuke.

But yeah, even a scythe would be amusingly appropriate given the nature of his own existence and his "boss". Beheading Thanos at some point with a scythe does sound pretty satisfying. Just, you'd need to find some nice in-between design that isn't too boring or too... anime. I like some of the ones from Dark Souls 3, because they're relatively simple but still look cool.

Anyway, good luck with the story.

Personally I loved this chapter and don't see anything wrong with it though the story is naturally worse to the author than the reader. I think you did a great job and I applaud you for it!

adore, love your story please continue

Pretty good story, good execution, nice character interactions. You tend to switch between first and third person pov accidentally, try to catch those mistakes, It's jarring but easy to fix. Good job!