makes a reference to John Wick: I AM BACK

I cut myself from the amount of edge Gudao has after failing to roll skadi

Megaolix

I'm going to be against you're arguement about ritsuka being "edgy".

To my perspective, that's PTSD rearing it's ugly head. The amount of distrust he emits at Belfast makes sense imo. Ritsuka is in a world where danger in an unimaginable scale exist in every possible corner and dimensions humans can think of. Imagine surviving all of that, but you're friends and family you know of isn't beside you after all that effort; and now it is happening again. To my eyes, fujimaru's distrust is justified.

The author has online classes, so it might be the cause of the slowness.

its going to be utterly hilarious when elizabeth finds out fujimaru is from japan and not britian, then again i coul be wrong. its been a while since ive played fgo

Okay, this is going to hurt a bit because now I notice something and I cannot say I like it.

Can I please hope the jaded and bitter Ritsuka will be gone? Pretty please? It's getting annoying and yeah, I know, separated from all those he loved and all that but jeez.

I get it, really. From what I see, he never really got over it and he never gew close to anyone else and lived aloen witha memento that reminded him of it. But honestly, I hope he can let it go already. Jaded and bitter already doesn't work in most serious stories already.

And that bit with Belfast? A small lie, something quite normal given no one sane would goddamn go forward with all that info on the get go and he pretty much kinda 'I will not trust you now and ever'? And that bit on hate? That's not cool. That's just edge. Stay away from edgy stuff, for the love of all that is holy. I cannot see it fitting here. Servants lied to him before, he even pulled some as well, don't you dare tell me honesty means never hiding anything. That one I forgive a lot less than the bitter and edgy part. There's only one other AL/FGO cross here and while it has much more words, the edge combined with raw bitterness is just plain annoying there.

Don't let this story become like that here.

And also, that part about sex just seems to come out of nowhere and got a abnormal focus on for something rated T. I understand you want to take it slow, but it felt like a needless filler here.

Finally, i’ve been waiting for this story to update! Keep up the good work. I wanna see what Fujimaru does next.

Fleece Johnson, for someone who said he proofreads this story, your English are shit.(or you just faking it? Don’t care.) And what’s wrong with talking a whole chapter? Good story don’t have to have a fight scene in every chapter, and as for a reference, is it wrong to put some random reference in it? Sometimes we have to lighten up the mood, ya’know? There’re a tons of authors who used others reference in their story too.(like JoJo reference) *sigh* Sorry about my rant, just have a crappy day. Great chapter.

What's up my faithful readers, I'm back! Herewith a new review to this garbagio story.

So first of all, thank you author for proving my point that Purifier can indeed destroy Lord Camalot, by the admission of " I have no doubts it could have bypassed Lord Camelot easily" Who's laughing now LoNeKaijiN? But unforchantyl for you, even if you agree I still have to rip into your story.

So first of all... What happened this chapter? Uhhh we waited this long for characters... talking? Take a look at how to do exposition right, in star war they're on their way to Alderan and learning about the jedi and stuff, they talk but move the story along. But instead this whole chapter took place inside apartment wtf... Nothing is happening! Maybe you should think about going back to school. Writing school.

secondonly, evwn though I am the one who put them in the story when I proofread, as the author you should stop me! Do you know how immersion-breaking it is for a reader to see a reference to "Deadly Premonition" or the "Star War" in a story about Azurlane X Fujimo Fateman?! I mean, when I wrote those in for you I figured you'd take them out... but you left them in! References are not good writing! Period. Imagine if in uhhhh Hamlet, they pause the story and go "Hey did you hear about those two lovers who killed themselves, haha very funny! I'm sure that will never happen to us." This is what I am doing to your story and you let me.. smh...

Unexpected Prequel meme... it’ll make a fine addition yo my collection. Please fo more.

Good chapter overall, a few misspellings here and there but nothin too out there. Part of me kinda wants to see everyone’s reaction if a Servant is temporarily summoned but that would inly he for the lolz. Lookin forward to more.

Have Shirou meet KGV for some funny moment

so...
is the update schedule 1 chapter/1-2 weeks?

Not going to lie, I had a similar reaction to Ritsuka when Sheffield explained what a master is lol. Good thing I wasn't eating anything. Don't worry about the chapters being slow, personally I also love these kinds of chapters where the focus is on the interactions between characters. Action is cool but downtime like this is nice too. Really interesting to see the effect Ritsuka is having on Sheffield. Really want to see more. Sad that the relationship between Ritsuka and Belfast has started badly considering she is one of my favs. Hope things patch-up between them.

His time as a master was really hard huh. Always seems to hit the feels when it is brought up. He was raised as a normal human, and yet had such a huge height placed on him. Nice scene.

Things are becoming really serious huh. I always wondered what would happen with the woman commander. Unlike the others, she seems to treat the shipgirs, or at least Belfast, with respect. Doesn't sound like she will have a happy time soon though. Feel bad for Belfast considering it looks like she feels guilty about it. Hope things don't go too badly for either of them.

So the other factions are active too and from what I understand even have their own commanders I think. Not sure, one of the lines in that scene seems to imply that to me. Really wonder what is going on with them. Especially after that scene with Friedrich. Is there something fishy going on there or am I thinking too much? Kinda worried that another Siren seems to have a big interest in Ritsuka too.

Can't wait for the next chapter. Really want to know what plan the Royal Navy has. Hope your classes are going well.

I love this story a pity that it takes you so long to update it, I also really liked the interactions between ritsuka and the maids

Good chapter.

Yeah, I like Ritsuka's interaction with Sheffield.