Phew, the chapter wasn't really fun, even if I understand its importance in the overall plot. Nevertheless, an unpleasant feeling remains...

Good chapter. While i think it will be good for the story, the hopeless romantic in me didnt like the fight scene a single bit. Hopefully, they get back together soon.

Really liking how the story is panning out.

Gave up man. Couldn't do it. Got to the part where Harry thinks I can't do this and then in the same breath turns around and goes okay? like wtf.

I probably brought this on myself. I dislike forced marriage fics because the characters always go "okay" with no fight. like yeah sure I'll sign away my right to love because *insert reason*.
I was hoping Harry would fight it thats why I read till this chapter but he didn't and the reason is asinine. What guarantee that these people will help him does he have? None.

And a more petty point is, this isn't Daphne Greengrass is it. This is an OC with the Greengrass name slapped on the end. I know Daphne isn't a fully fleshed out character in the actual HP series so people are allowed to take liberties with her but she isn't even a Greengrass.

Look I obviously do not enjoy the story but I'm sure people do, my goal isn't to get you to stop writing or to change the story. Keep on doing it if it makes you happy.

I really liked the chapter, especially the interactions between Harry and Daphne. However, somehow there is a threatening atmosphere. Daphne has secrets and Harry and Daphne hide their relationship. I hope at some point they don't have to do that anymore. Above all, I don't like Draco at all and I just hope that nothing bad will happen.

Wow
Wonderful

Just thinking why didn't Harry signed paper and what's Daphne's plan

That was a really sweet scene with Harry and Daphne. I liked that. And I'm curious to see what the ending of the chapter is all about. What is Daphne's plan?

It's not your writing that's the issue, but this depiction of Harry does one thing only: he yells every five minutes to the dot. That makes him into a seriously annoying character, which I'm not inclined to continue reading about. I guess he's just too immature, but he didn't come across like this in the books, so there's a disconnect somewhere.

Thank you for not doing bashing. It makes stories unreadable.

Since Queen is my favorite band, I found the music scene very funny, of course xD
Oh boy, I really hate Draco in these fics. I hope that will be resolved quickly.
I would advise you to continue to use a beta. That improved the chapters significantly and I also noticed with my own story how beneficial a beta can be. Because English is not my first language either.
I think in the general fanfiction subreddit there is a thread once a week where you can search for betas.

Even cannon Harry had more of a bitter response to the lack of communication than this. Even though I am happy for once to read a non-bashing fic, this no response immediate acceptance feels a bit weird.

Where to start...
First off, interesting idea. You have my attention and I plan to read on.
That said, the story feels rushed. You’re a little all over the place, and you could be clearer. You also switched from third person to first (if only for a single sentence).
I suggest picking a single perspective, one character to follow and only the one. This is clearly a “relationship” story. If the narrative only allows the reader insight to a single character’s motivations and feelings, there can be suspense. Once you share both sides, the reader knows exactly how everyone feels and there is no suspense. Instead the reader just has to wait for the characters to catch up. That’s frustrating and sometimes just flat out boring.
For example, say we follow Harry. We know how he feels and his struggles while he tried to figure out motives and if his new wife is truly into him or potential a danger to him. That’s exciting and make a reader want to read more.
Alternatively, we know how he feels, and we also know Daphne’s feelings too. We already know the end reveal...and all we have left is to suffer waiting for Harry and daphne to both know what we’ve already been privy to. See the issue?

I’m confused. The “woman” brings a cloaked girl with her. The girl’s hood is removed. The girl has black hair and red eyes, and she’s beautiful. So Harry has a true clear look at her.
Then the same girl removes the cloak completely, and that’s when Harry recognizes her at Daphne?
Her face clear as day didn’t do it form him. But removing the cloak did... does he identify girls by their boob size?
I’m super confused. Is there more than one girl?

I think the premise is B. S. No one should have that much authority over the next generation. We can screw it up bad enough on our own account. There is absolutely no excuse to allow some old fossil to ad their mistakes to your own. What were we suppose to figure out? Daphne was the match in the summery in the archive

Fascinating chapter that answers some questions, but also raises many new ones. I wonder what Daphne did, what her sin was supposed to be. Did she kill someone, maybe her father? I'm looking forward to finding out. The end with the indicated training of the two also sounds promising. They should be able to make some use of such a powerful book, shouldn't they?
Let's see how it goes on, whether Harry's friends will learn more and whether Daphne can win back the throne in the end.

Awesome