so far really enjoying the rerendition of the dbz story. Cant wait to see what twists you pull with the arrival of vegeta and nappa. The development of the other characters in unique ways are a nice touch and is something dragonball tends to neglect. Im guessing gokus time in snake way would be the closest to canon. Also I like the yamcha twist you did. Really helps give a more natural reason to the termination of his and bulmas relationship, and I always did want something more from there; especially after I watched dragonball then relooked at dbz. Gohans is a simple but obvious fix and helps to develoup piccolo,, though I think the harshness and inability for gohan to just go back to normal made the interactions they had in the original work all thr more poinant. Cant wait for more. If anything, I'd actually say you could slow down the pace a bit. Give us more character interactions and just develoup the cast. The bits we have are great; but a little more wouldnt have hurt. I especially hope to see more goku and see how having gine with him actually changed him.

Love everything that you have crafted so far!

I would recommend that Goku and Chi-Chi have more kids than just Gohan and Goten. This stems from the fact that they are constantly being eluded to having sex. This would also provide some interesting developments for the story as time goes on stemming from the interactions that characters would have with these new characters.

After reading everything that you have written so far, I love it!

There are a few hiccups here and there with word choice and spelling. Those are easily overlooked, though could be fixed with another proofread or two. For those, slow down and read each sentence out loud. Doing this will provide you with a gauge on what is needed where.

Content wise, you have done an excellent job crafting this tale. Referencing small things here and there is fun, don't let it consume what you have made. The story itself does add some much needed information on how the rest of the world would react to the presence of such fighters, this is a much needed improvement upon what was done in cannon. The balance that you have found for your version of the Z-fighters when it comes to power scaling was something that I felt was overlooked in cannon, too often it came down to a single fighter.

I implore you to craft your own version of the Future timeline, if such events will take place. The standard Future Trunks timeline gets old as it leaves out the affects that the changes from cannon could have had.

Will Nappa and Vegeta be redeemed? If so will they go native and potentially have families of their own? That would be an interesting development to see take place. It already appears that Nappa is interested in the prospect and might introduce the idea to Vegeta while they are traveling to Earth.

Aww, nice little bit between Raditz and Launch there. Looking forward to whenever this fic resumes.

Radditz and his hair would have issues if not properly cared for. My wife is a hair dresser, so I've learned some things. But yeah, someone skilled taking care of your hair? Definitely could lull someone to sleep. I wonder how much it would affect his appearance. The relaxation should also help with some of his emotional issues. Until next time.

This is interesting. I like the interaction between Raditz and Launch in this one, especially when she did his hair. Kinda adds and ASMR vibe to it. Well done

Great chapter, I can't wait to see more

I'm glad Raditz is making a friend, and possibly more.

Take care, good luck, stay safe, stay healthy, and I look forward to your next update.

good chapter.

aw even Yamcha is getting some love

Okay, color me surprised you managed to make a nice chapter focusing on the other Z Fighters who normally don't get much character spotlight, even in fics. Interested in seeing what Chiaotzu's training will yield, maybe even make him a rival with Guldo given they're both psychics, the bit with Piccolo was nice especially with Krillin showing up, and I'm really digging the chemistry you're giving Yamcha and Tights while at the same time foreshadowing Yamcha's inevitable break up with Bulma. Awesome work and I hope you update soon.

So out of curiosity, how much gravity does that device can bring out, since if its a 100, then Raditz, Gine and Goku got this. Since goku gain a power level of 90,000(or assuming from blog as it is definitely higher than 23,000.) or basically trained to a point he defeated the ginyu force without Kai-o-ken. Then again Goku would be dealing with a gravity of 10 from king kai, mix with that gravity device...might be overwhelming, especially if he keeps the training clothes.

Please make tights and nappa a couple

Great chapter, I can't wait to see more.

Sweet chapter