that was great keep the chapters coming

i liked it hope you wright more of it soon. i would like to read more

I wonder what you’ll do with naruto not being able to use chakra and how kurama will come into play now

Always a fan of hinata, I hope you add her, but it’s your story and I’m enjoying it

Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.

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Good luck with your fanfic

Nice update.

Though sadly, you're still cramping the dialogue of multiple people in the same paragraph, making it difficult for us readers to distinguish what is going on and who is talking.

great chapter looking forward to more

Great start looking forward to more

Sure add Hinata too. She doesn't have to be the "main" girl.

Awesome start and I hope you don't add Hinata

I vote to swap out Hinata for Anko, gotta have my Hebi-hime! lol

Also tossing Princess Koyuki's name into the ring as a secondary option.

Anyways, love the concept and love how you made it different from the story that inspired it. Even if Naruto drifting down the river from the VOTE is a bit of a long shot, considering where it is located in comparison to the seas location. But, details.

Now for the critique.

Few spelling errors, you used 'Mame' when I am assuming you intended to use 'Ma'am' when Sakura was speaking with the Hokage.

Dialogue is clumped in the middle of the paragraphs, which make it a little difficult to read and follow who is saying what. Best example I can give to clear it up is how I do in my stories. So that way it is easy for readers to follow with whats going on and who is talking.

As for the pacing, not to bad. Some parts felt a little rushed, like Sakura immediately abandoning the village to join Naruto, but can be over looked as you already implied that she was worried about his lack of arrival with the others.

We also didn't get to see Tsunade's reaction to the message she received about Naruto being alive and the council demanding his death, maybe have that as a flashback sequence in the next chapter?

Anyways, those are the main things. But don't feel discouraged, We all started somewhere, and we can only improve once we start.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

interesting start I look forward to reading more as for harem suggestions I suggest Tayuya, Samui, and Temari strong kunoichis who would be great for Naruto and maybe Shizune as well

Will Naruto be friends with Yoruichi.