And now the reveal of his past life and shit, as bad stories generally tend to rush towards. Also, why the fuck would Ned not know how a goddamned longbow works? He was one of the military generals of a multi-year-long war and then again against the Greyjoys. Having Jon teach him how dangerous a bow is is just utterly ridiculous. You're ruining your own story in quite a few ways.

Eugh. The character interactions were really off. Jon makes some face and Ned immediately replies with "Jon you seem [correct emotion]d, let me hear what your thorughts are on this issue."

Nowhere in your writing did it feel anywhere near realistic.

Love it keep up the good work

You make this to easy for the main character and revealing from the get go what he is is unbeliable and reduce the lenght this story can go on without getting boring and too easy to write an op character make poor story unless there is a proper challenge for him I suggest you read a Farmer tale's it original idea is similar. Futhermore, the story is good but you are only using big amelioration that are not so original futhermore 160 pound bow at this day and age would not have been common 100 pound long bow would have most likely been the type used by the english for the battle of Azincourt. I would have like you to introduce the late crossbow too far more easy to wield and fire but really heavy still shred to plate. Instead of big change simply augmentation of the production of windmill and the lack would have been a better begenning or simply

keep it going! lets goooooooo

Love it sif ar, can't wait to see what happens next!

Thanks for the chapter!

Please keep going

Nice chapter!

I like what you did with Marge, but I don't much like presaged shit, like saying that Euron sewed the seeds of his houses downfall.

That's a personal thing though, I hate fics where they reveal the outcome of a battle before the battle has happened, like they're being interviewed for a textbook.

I've put the story on alert, I've very much enjoyed it so far.

I like when the past life stuff is minimal, I hate the whiny bitch transplants who curse at ROB. (not to be confused with Robb)

It's like, if they can REINCARNATE you, they can DEINCARNATE you.

I actually dig you went with Death bed to birth bed, left a little mystery on it, and Jon seems to be at least accepting of his second existence.

Also avoids that damn cliché truck.

I have very much enjoyed the story so far.

finally! jon snow si, been waiting for this in ages. and we have second si/reincarnation too, keep up the good work.

This is an interesting idea of an SI.

Bruh,too good. Keep it up.

Uh not a fan of the SI telling that he is a SI