this is really good

this is super good
maybe pls continue

this is fantastic!

A fic about Whitley with a Helltaker portrait ? Bam Favorited just for being a man of culture.

This was an interesting story. I enjoyed the sibling relations and the Lancelot-Whitley father-son bond. Likening him to Galahad was a nice touch that helped make the story more flowy and natural. Great work

A word of advice: try not to use the same words too much in the story. I’ve noticed “whilst” and “quick to” were repeated a lot. This could just be me being picky, though.

This was great to read! A few nitpicks, admittedly.

For one, Adam's sword, Wilt, is a chokuto, not a katana.

Second, in terms of Fate lore, the ability that allows Lancelot to fight using anything he perceives as a weapon is Knight of Owner, Eternal Arms Mastership simply keeps his fighting abilities from degrading, regardless of time or mental interference (such as Madness Enhancement when he manifests as Berserker).

Those small complaints aside, I really liked this, and it's a shame that it's just a one shot.

This is good man and now I'm going to cry because this is only a one shot

Wow. This was a fantastic read. Hats off to you!