The premise of this story is interesting, but it’s a bit non consistent and seems to skip around. Why would he just share info with her and follow her around doing what was done in cannon.

He is a SPARTAN, first thing he should have done is gather intel and try and communicate with the army. So raiding the library.

Nope, not going to read this.

First, learn to read a goddamn novel and see how it is usually formatted. Then look back at this and consider rewriting it.

THE CRINGENING

Awesome update. Really looking forward to reading more.

Why does it follow the anime to a T?

im sure you worked hard on this but the quality isnt up to standards. it actually reads more like a rough draft.

Good chapter also more Spartans kicking ass

why would Wardes confess,even if he just died he could have sown distrust against Saito by accusing him of undermining Tristain or somesuch.

Awesome update. Looking forward to reading more.

Love your story. Looking forward to reading more.

God, this is bad. I’m sorry, but this is so, so awkward.

Fun little fic good job also Saito here reminds me of the main character in full metal panic just more self-aware

Well an Halo X FOZ fanfic good. I implore you mate just don't abandon this fic.

"Communication is up, from the nearest UEG territory. It is within a thousand light years away.

"I got your coordinate Saito, a rescue ship is on the way here. Can you stay for another few months?"

Wow that ship must have shitty ftl speed if it took long time to reach that place.

I exclude unsc infinity (which has ftl speed around 1,500 LY per Day) since this fic probably take place before halo 4

Fyi. covenant ftl speed is around 900 LY per day which is equivalent to coden VI by unsc standard. most unsc frigate and destroyer use coden IV while unsc cruiser use coden V (let just say coden IV have ftl speed 200 LY per day and 400 LY per day for coden V) that just take less than month for coden IV and less than weeks for coden V to reach halkeginia planet (i assume that halkeginia distance around 4,000 LY)

well unless you use civilian/colonial spaceship which is slower than military ship then it make sense *maybe

I'm happy to see Saito, especially as a Spartan but there is a point that bothers me, you stay way too close to the original canon.

I can hardly imagine Spartan Saito acting and behaving in the same way as "canon" Saito.

your story has potential, I suggest deviating from the original canon. Look forward for more