I get that you have a thing for weird names... but is so fuking distracting... is eccentricity for eccentricity's sake and it really detracts from the narrative

ok... you redeemed yourself... but I'll be watching!

ow, no, just no! you don't just kill off Hedwig, I hated Rowling for that and I'll hate you too!

I really enjoy this story thank you for not taking it down a lot of my favorite story's have been taken down. Finding this story to read again has been wonderful thank you for writing and posting this story.

Very entertaining story.

/good start.

Wonder if the attackers were aware that 1. Gringotts London may have been a branch, but it was still just a branch...they have other banks and 2. Pissing off Goblins is a bad idea.

Go to youtube and read the book of Enoch, which the Catholic Church stripped from the Bible centuries ago. If you can understand the symbolism in it, it will tell you plenty about existing spirits and the fact that there are indeed lesser gods over which the Creator of All rules.

this makes no sence, just because you say 113 doesnt make it so, and you dont explain why its like you're talking math while discribing how the leaves fall from the tree. this is the best analogy i can make, things you discribe have nothing to do with the story or even the setting they only distract from what little plot you have.
hell even luna could talk more coherent then this

wind teleportation? just wtf even for magic that doesnt make sence

its really weird all your senteces start with 3 tabs, cant explain it better than this my english is to basic for that

Sigh... the length of review replies included in each chapter is very annoying. Takes away from the story so much

Nothing worse than reading a good story- that gets good reviews- then the author starts doing half of every ch as replies to reviews. Really infuriating tbh

I was liking your story until I found out you killed Prof. Flitwick, my favorite teacher, how sad. Well see you and I hope you learn from your mistake!

If you were 15/16 when writing this...then I truly hope that you have pursued a writing career. Yes, this is written in Jo’s world, but you have created your own slice of reality and characters based on a completely separate idea. You could ...with a lot of hard work and find/replace rework the story to be not HP and publish this. I would watch this on a big screen!