Why did you stop? This is/was the best and GREATEST story that I've read. Especially since it includes my favorite pokemon. Please come back.

FINALLY! A Pokémon story that includes bathrooms!
(Nice story, btw)

Hmmm, it's a shame that this story does indeed seem destined to be unfinished. I remember liking it a lot when I first read it, a long time ago. If you're still around, I hope you make good on your promise to finish this, but as that seems unlikely, it's an unfortunate way to end this story.

Sincerely,

NYSTLSportsFan

I can't belive relees actuly stopped the fiction it was good if will always remeber this D':

I'm with vulprix here he right plz don't stop we love the story and we want to know the end

Not sure. If my last comment went up, but you are holding everyone in suspense and we just sit and wait. I will continue to check for this story to be updated for 2 years from now. I hope you finish.;_;

Come on you can't just stop when the story gets good

Good so far

vulpix !

Wazap! It's Truebolt again. ... Actualy I dont know If I've reviewed this particular fanfic, but I have been reading it and waiting for the next chapter (chapter 19) for like two weeks. I love the story and the characters are very well defined. (Also I must say that the Eeveelutions are by far my favorite pokemon groupe) The plot was good, and I never knew what was going to happen next. I also thought it was very good how the characters ended up being conected differently than you origionaly thought: Raika being Jolteon's mom, Umbreon and Espeon having some background. It keeps you on you'r toes ) One thing I might sugjest, (as a personal opinion) is that you have more action in the diolog. There are many instances where characters will be talking and I lose track of who is saying what. Also you might try using *askterisks* when Espeon uses telepathy, becaus I personaly find it slightly easyer to read. Other than that, there are a few minor spelling errors, and sentances that could be expanded apon. All in all I truly love you'r story. PLEEEEESE post te next chapter! 3 Also I will be glad to help with anything I can in this terrific story. If you, ask. -This has been TrueBolt. Over and out.-

This has been one of the best reads in fanfic world. I love the characters, and I love the story. I can't wait for the rest of it XD Onequestion thoe; how many chapters is it going to be? Anyway, keep it up!

Dude, I freaking Love you're story. YOU...MUST...FINISH... O_O

There were a few spelling errors throughout, but the story line is great ) If you ever want help, I'd be glad to advise a great story writer like yourself XD the only review materiel I have is when Espeon and Umbreon are thought-speaking, it would be easier to read like;

[Quote]

Espeon, we're on our way. Umbreon's voice came clearly through the psychic's telepathic connection. I sent Ereyla off with Flareon, the Rattatas, and Jennifer – the rest are with me. [end Quote]

Try using and signs for thought-speak. it makes it easier to read. Just a suggestion. )

Also, when a character thinks to itself, its easier to understand if you make it clear that that's what they are doing. I do it like this, but you may find a better way;

The lavender pokémon glanced up at the window where she was sure Stephanie was being held, wishing she could just barge in and get her out now.

*Of course, that would virtually be suicide,*

Espeon thought idly. Stephanie probably wouldn't fare too well, either. Espeon felt increasing remorseful every time Stephanie cried – she had been going on and off ever since she first sent word to Umbreon about her whereabouts. All she could do now was wait. Hopefully, Umbreon wouldn't cause a commotion when he came in. [end Quote]

These are the only editorial suggestions I can make at this time, other than when characters talk to each other, it gives the story more color if there is an action directly before, or directly after the quote.

[Quote]

"My point exactly," Umbreon responded coolly. "Back at the CPA building was complete luck – you don't have the experience nor the know-how to battle a seasoned pokémon head-to-head. And no telling what you might do when we make it to Stephanie. It's not worth the risk to her well-being, or to yours for that matter."

(I stared at Umbreon with a pleading look) "But –"

(Umbreon's red eyes glowed) "I said, no."

something like that

Nice story

Hey there, just found your story here and got to the end. So far I'm greatly enjoying it! ;)

I know this seems a little belated, but it's my signature so,

Keep going! :)

Really good fic you've written up here.

I like the characters. Each one of them has their own problems, both socially or emotionally, and they just fit somehow.

One thing that confused me was earlier in the story Vaporeon's leg along with Nimbus's wing were broken, but later it seemed like they magically healed.

Story is good so far. Finished reading what you already have posted early, so it seems I won't be able to celebrate the 2 year hiatus, shame. But still, hope you decide to revive this story, it's really good and I don't really like cliffhangers all that much so I'm crazy to see how it all ends.