Your writing style is very interesting and compelling to read. The characterization is also really good. You have Beat, an asshole- who is still somewhat gentle with Yoyo. He loves Yoyo, but cannot show that he has a soft side. Yoyo is vulnerable and shy, trying to get his feelings across to Beat who absolutely dominates him. It's an interesting dynamic and I like it. Nice work!

besty fanfic ive red in aGES

GAD DAMNIT! you stopped right before the lemon! i think... i was confused most of the time.

that was so perfect! please do more! i love your storys!

Yo!

Dude this fic is like totally wicked, i mean you have such good taste! Being a lovely teenage tomboy i know what to look at in for a boy, but please, Yoyo and Beat? Why not Garam or Combo? ha just messin' with ya! This fic is cool, i like it, the way you show it like you already know what it feels like, the way you make me wishing you'd write another chapter. Okay ti was a bit confusing at first, but it got easier at the end.

Not to be a spoil spirt or anything but it was the Noise Tanks who got Yoyo? I aven't go that far in the game yet but thanks for the tip :)

Anyways if this story is finished which i probably think it it, seeing as it didn't have a to be continued, or an actual ending to it either. But if you ever do write another chapter, or write anothers tory like this gives a shout! Coz i like it :)

Good luck man, and best wishes for many a fic!

With loads of Friendship Love

Fire Of Darkness

Wow...I've never had so many graphic images in my head like that before. I like it! And since Beat and Yoyo were in it...I LOVE IT!

Cirrus, another job well done. i love your Yoyo/Beat fics. this one was so lovely and metaphoric too. i also liked how you portrayed Beat. definately going under faves _ great job.

*worships and loves your writing* Aiee, that was really good. I really enjoyed the love-hate of the relationship and the way you made Beat sympathetic to the reader and yet such a bastard. Please write more! My only gripe was in places your meaning seemed a little unclear, or it was hard to place what was going on, but that may be (a) because I haven't played JSRF (b) I'm not that awake at the moment. So overall excellent!

Brilliant. Very nice, I love it. Beat, a complete asshole, Yoyo, the immature little kid - you had the characters written perfectly, and you actually had a good excuse for getting the rest of the GGs out of the way, as opposed to the usual 'oh... they're all gone - let's make out!' approach!

The only thing was, and I know how nitpicky and horrible this'll sound, but I was rather confused when you called Corn 'Tab' - that's about it, really.