You know your first bit of this chapter with your little experiment?
I made me think you were severely dyslexic and I was about to drop the story until it had been beta'd at least once.

TeaGrannymcmlxiii

Wow that sure was manipulative of the wizards to seperate a family like that. (Im talking about the kids not the adults)

Omg keep writing! You're really talented. Proper grammar and every thing! ( very rare in fanfiction, I've found) I'm working on my own Potter fic, but its not up yet. I haven't even got an account! Lol. I'm writing chapter two though so I can upload practically within minutes of each chapter :) it'll be titled "Harry and Sage Potter and the Philosopher's Stone". Look out for it? (Note it'll probably be a couple months soz *gives bashful look* speaking of bashing... Are the Carltons gonna get their die? (Oops did I say "die"? I meant get their "due", of course, their "DUE". Lol) continue... I don't want to waste any more of your time that you could otherwise be spending writing the nex chapter! On you go!

sweet

:D!Oh myyy! What a wonderful fic overall,i loved the characters,the way the children of different ages were written,real good work with them all!And the situation Harry's in,not being abused or anything but not being treated properly either,it made it so much more realistic somehow!

And not to mention Remus,his thoughts and reactions to everything,the way he handles Harry,all of it was cool!XD!I absolutely adore the ending,you brought those kids all together again,really sweet!And the way Harry's finally brought up and is still reluctant to be spoilt like other kids,great explanation for those!

Love love loved your writing!

i totally love this! just so you know your writing rulz!

so sweet thanks for sharing

sweet - hope to see a sequal.

This story was super extremely awesome until the very end. I was a little disappointed that none of the children really remebered each other.

So here's ur score!

Plot-5/5

Setting-5/5

Characters-5/5

Storyline-4/5

Ending-2/5

Overall-21/25

On another note. This is the first story I actually read the whole way threw. It was a whole lot better then most of these stories.

I was looking for a story about Harry before he went to Hogwarts, somethig very original, something kind of deppressing and sad but not too much, and something with no essence of Ron and Hermione.

CONGRATS! This story is ecxactly what I was looking for! I even bookmarked it onto my computer.

Amaazing job. You could totslly use this plot and become an author!

This was pretty cute! _

-M

I'm sorry but the ending to this story was horrid. I was really enjoying it until THEY STRIPPED HARRY OF HIS IDENTITY! It just seems like a betrayal of trust to destroy everything that make's Harry Harry. He probably would have had some issues, yes, but no one had the right to take that away, remove him from his siblings...Just...ugh.

No! They should have kept those children together! Oh stupid people!

Take the others too! Please!

Ok These people should never have been allowed to adopt! What was Child Protective Services thinking?

Excellent story!

Take the other children too. leave evidence that they abused them so they can't adopt more or fix their memories so they won't want too. Find these children loving homes!