Warning: Reading this story may be slightly hazardous to your health. I laughed so hard I gave myself a headache. This is the funniest fanfic I have ever read.

Ah damn out of chapters...at least it end on the wedding...though I really don't see the girls (or in laws) quitting that easily, im sure Indiana...i mean Keitaro will have many mistresses/concubines.

...Well that is unless there's some sort of MolMol or ancient Shinmei-ryu ritual that somebody will exploit to marry many brides to one man ;;

A fun read, as well as well written. You have captured the spirit of the manga and anime with the way that you have written your story, as well as all the hilarity and zaniness. You also did a good job of capturing the essence of each person involved, I believe, even though they may have changed to some extent over the intervening years.

Keep up the good work on future stories, and maybe also come back to this one eventually.

While I always regret seeing a great story abandoned, at least you dropped out in a place that could pass for the ending. Magnificent work with this. I really can't think of ANYTHING to critique; hell, if anything, Akamatsu oughta be given a link to this and instructed to take notes. I think Motoko's mother may have just become my new favorite character in the LH universe, and you just made her up! If you're still writing, never stop. If you aren't... *eyes narrow* don't make me get the stick. You wouldn't like the stick.

I've read this and came back in here to review.

A VERY amusing take on the cast. A pity about what happened between Keitaro and Naru, but considering that, she's a bit too possessive with him.

Still, nice story.

-chronodekar

fantastic story when tis the next chaptor due i carnt wait to read it keep it up

I take it this is abandoned?

Great story.

Thanks,

I almost cried at the end was sad but I mostly cried because it was the last chapter. You are a true artist.

Not to be rude, but for chapter 4, the correct thing is that Kitsune was attempting to use her body to avoid the rent. She drinks all her money away, and so she's not charging. Moreover, she's trying to get out of paying by 'whoring' her body off. Only difference is that he's only touching her breasts, nothing more...

DUDE THIS IS A GREAT STORY DONT STOP again UPDATE SOON ie Proceed with the next WAIT.

good chapter

good chapter

good chapter

nice chapter poor keitaro every girls wants him