i love it

I loved it. Sappy yet wonderful!

This was so cute! I really liked your style and the way you took phrases and made them apart of the story. We had to do an assignment similar to that in my Freshman Seminar class (a really, gay pointless course that (if you don't live in Maryland) you should be glad not to have).

It gave me goosebumps and that warm, tingling feeling, well done!

This was very good, you could turn this into a full fledged story with what you've got, or even have a sequel come from it with these guild lines.