Something that isn't here that might be fun is Professor Oak's reaction to Ranma's return. Or Team Rockets for that matter. After all how many people come back to life after blowing up along with their headquarters?

I'd also like to see Ranma's reaction to Professor Oak's storage and just how big Ash's collection of "friends" actually is. Oh and just how many of those companions have been left in the storage for over a year.

Might want to do a rewrite to further fill out the timeline. And maybe get more world building in. So far only your couple their Pokemon and the Amazons have even really been introduced.

There isn't even a cut away for the mothers reaction. No scenes showing the Amazon POV or how regular towns are taking the story of a girl who without using a Pokémon took out an entire Amazon Gym Leaders team. We don't even know if they are giving any details on that fight or just letting people assume some kind of weapon was used to disable them.

What about any of the games usual badguys from the 3 continents? Do they know anything do they care?

There is allot more that could be written about without having to stay laser focused on Ranma's group.

Daniel Thomas Stack
AKA Spokavriel at yahoo.

I know why on the meta level you decided to use the name Ketchum but this is not Ranma's world Ranma clearly knows it so why any worry about using his own family name? Is he afraid he's going to bring dishonor on some parallel by using it as a technical Ronin here?

Its not like Ranma was cast out of his family. He left his home world because the circumstances of his left had left him with no way to avoid being more than a burden to his family there. This wasn't even like Sepuku where he suicided to take dishonor with him. Although if the beginning were changed to have him use an enchanted Tanto so he was healed and transported on the finishing strike it could have been used that way...

How does Zumi know the Rules? how many years as a Pichu were spent learning the precepts of the Pokémon league?

This story has been dormant for a long while, Still interesting even if the Ketchum name usage almost made me stop I'm going to look to see where this goes.

Daniel Thomas Stack
AKA Spokavriel at yahoo.

Wow, while short this was a really great story

Not too shabby:)

Interesting concept. Over all a good story...sequel idea...send Ash to Ranma' s world and now Ranma must retrieve his Son.

Awesome story. Please write a sequel!

Kanai is the correct word? No, it's not. It may be the correct word in Japanese, however this is a story written in English. Names are one thing, since they don't translate perfectly. Some stories like One Piece, where the word "Nakama" has a different meaning that is special the show are another. Adding in a Japanese word randomly, however, just makes the story confusing in my opinion.

Anyways, I enjoyed this story. Personally though, I think the beginning chapters were far better than the latter chapters. In the end, everything just seemed rushed together to form a perfect Disney ending. Not to mention just suddenly giving Ranma Pokemon attacks and control over magic. Too god-like for my tastes. As for Ash thinking badly of his dad...I doubt that's what Ash would do. His mom would have said that Ranma died, and he'd probably wish he could have spent time with his father.

Speaking of magic, what happened to the curse? The last time Ranma was female was when Delia found out. I'm not saying that Ranma should have had sex as a girl, seeing as you hate slash, but unlike the beginning you sort of just ignored it. There were many scenes that would have been nice editions to the story. For instance, I could see Ranma working as a Nurse Joy in Pallet Town. He cares for Pokemon more than most trainers do for one thing, and his female form could look quite similar to them. If Professor Oak wasn't available, then Ranma could give out starter Pokemon instead. By doing that he'd be making sure that new trainers aren't abusive to their Pokemon. I was also hoping for Ash's reaction to first seeing the curse. What about Professor Oak's reaction to the transformation? The neighbors reactions upon seeing Ranma transform?

Anyways, thanks for the story. I had fun reading this c:

Senbon needles? I suppose fish bones would work fairly well for them, but...Unlike the Naruto world, Senbon aren't a very good weapon choice. I could list a bunch of reasons why they aren't, especially for hunting, but I suppose Ranma's superhuman speed could make them work. Ah well :p

nice fiction. give Ranma more girls please.

i enjoyed this story very much ne

It'd be nice if you could do a sequel...

I was wondering if I could use your teams that Ranma and Delia have in your story for the rewrite of my own version of how Ash's adventure goes. Also this is one of my favorite Ranma in Pokearth story the other one being Fist of the Pikachu.

Absolutely incredible and amazing story!

A splendid little read. It would be awesome if you did a rewrite, though. I can see Ranma encountering many amazing situations that you didn't mention. You could easily stretch it out to several times its original length, making for an epic story.