Dean saying "sucks" is a little out of character, "stinks" or "smells" is a little more in line with Dean's super clean way of talking, the kid calls his testicles "no-nos" after all

But other wise this chapter and the other 2 you've added since the last time I read this are pretty great keep up the good work

cool

Waiting for more.

I really like this fic. Venture Bros should be explored more in . It's really open to a lot of speculation.

I'd like to see a bit more of Pete White, and I gotta say that I'm really enjoying these stories :D

Keep it up :3

Cute. But he should have sent her a form letter back. Like.

Thank you [sally],

for you interest in Venture Industries!

For tours and events, please see below!

etc etc etc.

Great chapter.

There's no way 21 has never seen Night of the Living Dead. That's a classic. He probably owns a box set of both versions or something.

I can really see this happening. From a comment that Dr. Venture makes in 'Ice Station Impossible', it's totally possible that he just couldn't stay awake during lab.

I really want to know how the Monarch started to hate him so.

Great chapter. This one's my favorite out of your storybook.

I like this chapter very much, its so...dark. I'm glad to see you back! We defenetly need more VB fan fiction writers.

Always a tuff job making up 'back history' for a Fic. But you did it.

Great job!

Great VB Fan Fiction! You sure got their 'voices' down. Please keep writing more like this.

_ Ha ha! Funny! Please right more of these.

- Funny!

that was great. i think this was the first venture story, PLEASE keep them going! even if u have to resort to yaoi.. that is A~ok with me!

a venture brothers fanfiction! very very happy!