I love the story~!X3

is there more? plz!

I love this! I love It!

Ooh, love the ending to this chapter. I can't wait to see what happens next!

Oh, I can't wait to read what happens next. Please update soon! Love it!

Not bad at all! I'm getting into this so I hope you will not make any of your readers wait too long.

I'm intrigued by your explanation of Sarah's hold over the Labyrinth, and I am especially interested to know how your theories are going to pan out. How exactly will the Labyrinth (nice touch, saying Jareth never beat it himself) settle for Toby instead of Sarah?

Hm... so many questions, so much to think about. _

Good luck with chapter 5.

_ Ah, the awesomeness...

WONDERFUL fic you've got goin' here. And I adore your 'knights' to help Toby. LOVE the fic, so please continue soon!

Quite fascinating. You've used completely different beings in the Labyrinth, this time around. Beautifully described and structured, my dear.

Now the only thing to answer is: What is this Ceremony?

Waiting for the next chapter. _

Ahh! I love Sir Lear and Sir/Lady Creepy-fairy-chick! The Sir/Lady fairy person was so creepy, and then I liked her when she helped Toby! The chapter was really good, one suggestion though: when you swtich from Toby to Sarah's situation, put a little scene breaker, like some hyphens or zeroes or something. It'll help a lot! Looking forward to the next chapter!

What? No three? *runs around looking for chapter three* Aw dangit. This is so good, I can't wait to see what happens. Please update soon!

Oh, I certainly hope so too!

You're getting better at this, babe. I can't wait to see the next chapter. What, oh what, will Jareth do to Toby next?

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Good.

I LOVE this fic. It's two chapters in and... I LOVE it. It's well written, and I love Toby's character. Pleasepleaseplease continue!

Thanks for the review, babe. You really made my day. _ The series is a little too hard to take in all at once, so I'm very glad you had the patience to sit through it.

And now for your fiction...

It is a little cliched, but then most of our work here is. Don't worry about it. Just write it as you see it and everything will be fine. Good writing will always make up for a conventional story.

Just a suggestion- try not to be defensive about anything. Your work will flow better if you just *write*. Don't *think* about descriptions or what words to use. Just imagine you're actually talking to someone and there you go.

Apart from that, I'm very interested in what kind of Jareth you're going to use. Your characters are nice and I'm glad to see your Toby is so hyper. I hope he drives Jareth mad! _

Good luck with the rest, sweetness. Oh, and just keep an eye on your punctuation. It's a little thing, but it makes it easier for the reader if a comma is where a comma is supposed to be.